To the girl with a broken heart

Just some inspiration. Hope you like it

I see you standing there, showered in light
But I know, inside, you’re consumed by night
It’s like everything is wrong, your world crashing down
And inevitably in the ocean of pain you will drown

Is that the echo of where your heart used to be?
What happened to that smiling girl I long to see?
The hollow silence of where your laughs had been
And his scorching mark upon your skin

The comforting warmth of his strong hold
Left your crying and empty body so cold
The smile that once left you breathless
Those feelings you just couldn’t express

All the things I want to say, things you need to hear
But I know you’re filled with pain too hard to bear
Maybe you won’t hear it from this far away
So I pray to the swift wind to carry it your way

“Don’t smile if it’s going to be fake
And pretend you can’t feel the heartache
It’s alright to break down and cry
If it makes it easier to kiss him good-bye

There is no shame in missing him
Feelings still flowing far over the brim
It’s alright to want to make things right
To return to things before the ending fight

But the curse of restraining bind ended
Leave the broken shards that can’t be mended
Forget this shattered mirror that caused so much pain
And don’t try to extract that scarlet stain

Move to other things and try not to think
Of that wineglass that you used to drink
If his phantom is still in there, make him the past
Make bitter images into gentle memories that last”

When those rivers of tears start to run dry
And when the bright shine returns to those eyes
When your smiles are reborn on your lips
And when you’ve grown strong from the hardships

Maybe you’ll give me the chance
To lead you to start a new dance
Maybe you’ll let me kiss you in the rain
And wash away remains of the dying pain

Maybe you’ll allow me to whisper in your ear
Those six words that will wipe away all fear
To lean in and feel your presence so near
And say to you “I love you. I am here.”

So I stand here, drinking this wine
Waiting for the day when you’ll be mine

 

Author's Note

Any suggestions?

Reviews

[Dezarae]

wow.. that is an amazingly beautiful poem! i love it!!! makes me want to cry, its like every single word jumps out to me, i have had so much going on in my relationship, and i swear if a man would have come up to me and read or given me a poem like that during that time, he would have swept me off my feet, just so beautifully written, you will win many hearts with writings like that.... if you havent found a true love yet, im sure it wont be long, or hard to do so! it is amazing to see people out there that can express their hearts and love in such a way as what you wrote, again beautiful!!!!

[J.M]

The only thing I don't get to do with this poem is why you feel the need to get suggestions and change it. It is completely and truly beautiful as it is. In this poem you seem to have captured something that everyone feels at some time in their life, and described it perfectly. Well done!

[Hayley]

Breath-taking! You are a lovely poet, writing such beautiful things. This line was exceptional: There is no shame in missing him Feelings still flowing far over the brim It’s alright to want to make things right To return to things before the ending fight.

[Raivenne]

What suggestions? This is heartbreakingly lovely as is. If we live long enough, unfortunately, we all get to know what this feels like first hand.

[deeps]

Suggestions for what? It is amazing the way it is
I really like all the emotion you have weaved into this.

[Lilly]

Beautiful poem! Very touching - I can relate to this.
Great work.

[Jessica Mai]

This is another great poem from you. So touching. Awesome write

[Early November]

I actually forgot to breathe while reading this. I guess that's why this poem would be most suitably commented as 'breathtaking'.

Brilliant, absolutely brilliant.

[Nickle]

wow...that was amazingly heartfelt...i love poems like this and i rlly enjoyed reading it...i think some of the rhymes were a stretch but u pulled it off nicely and it flowed really well...good poem :)

[Blue tailed kite]

Its so overwhelmingly touching.... beautiful, I simply have no other words

[Huggy Bear]

Congrats on placing in the fragrance of love contest:)