shut door

 

I’m watching it all fade out

Not a glimmer of hope

Not a shadow of doubt

 

I start to walk away

Then turn back around

And think of ways to make you pay

 

All the doubt you’ve given

All the pain I’ve shown

It’s easy to see

But hard to be forgiven

 

My mind changes

And I turn away again

Never looking back

I greet the new life I’ll begin

 

Where you never knew me when

Never heard what I did

Never known who I’d been

Only believed what I said

 

I turn my back on it all

Trying to forget

I won’t ever let you see

Won’t ever let you quit

 

I need to hear you say

That you’ll always love me more

Because it’s only for you

That I’ve forever shut that door

Reviews

[Katie Foutz Voss]

There's a very interesting transition about 1/3 of the way down. You change the rhyme scheme. And then, there seem to be two listeners. With the transition of rhyme there is also a change in who the speaker is directing her thoughts at. The theme of new beginnings goes very well with a poem that has a transition. Nicely done.

[Jessica R.]

It's a rather interesting piece. I do have to say that there seems to a transition, and it goes very well with the meaning of the poem. I like it.