Sacrafice

Sacrafice

A Poem by Darkwaters

 

If I had fallen upon my knees
prostrating myself before the alter
of his ego I would ache in my soul

Inside and out of this shell
I drip with seething anger
a rage so deep I am rooted

The unsettling truth has dried and cracked
kept me from sleep, twisting in pain
to understand the unforgiveable.

Was she so sweet in her adoration
like a sirens song calling him to shipwreck
I was, Circe, my warnings to be ignored

No, I was the doomed Cassandra
the gift of sight not to be heeded
knowing the end before it began.

It was all so simple, so easy
and forgettable to him
but blackened in me is the sad, sad truth

Raw and bitter fruits I have swallowed
all in the name of love that grew so hallow
When did the words die of their meaning?

It was upon the alter of mans ego I died
ashes to ashes and dust to dust
a sacrifice in unholy thoughts

© 2008 Darkwaters


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great allusions, anything with Cassandra in it has me gushing - a fan of the ancient poems -
here's a great line i liked: "a rage so deep I am rooted" - - there are others, but that one stood out for some reason.
why the shifting sex of the pronouns, i understand there may be different voices/speakers but it would help if that were clarified a bit --
thanks for sharing this, keep writing and i'll keep reading
g.

Posted 13 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.




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Oh you write about betrayal so well. I really see how each stanza here describes emotion and the stages that the narrator goes through. It's quite lovely in how complete it is.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A really great piece!!!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i have to honestly say that it took me a while to develop the idea of this poem...it was good, although the rhyme scheme was a bit weak (then again, poetry doesn't need to rhyme). overall, i think it was nice...i just had to read it a couple of times b4 i actually "got it" you know?

Posted 13 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Strong, powerful imagery and emotion - easy for me to relate to considering recent events in my own life.
Very eloquent way of expressing the situation and the moment and to promote the healing process. Glad I read this and thank you for writing it! TD :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the darkness that flows through this ... very nicely done..

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Very nicely written, lovely write.. very good images and strong subject.
The poem has a very good flow..

Chloe
xoxo

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

great allusions, anything with Cassandra in it has me gushing - a fan of the ancient poems -
here's a great line i liked: "a rage so deep I am rooted" - - there are others, but that one stood out for some reason.
why the shifting sex of the pronouns, i understand there may be different voices/speakers but it would help if that were clarified a bit --
thanks for sharing this, keep writing and i'll keep reading
g.

Posted 13 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

very beautiful! good work! :)


Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

I like this. The dark aspect adds to it and brings across the subject very good. This kind of reminds me of something that might pop up in The Black Jewels Trilogy by Anne Bishop. *shrug* That's just what it made me think of. Great work! ^_^

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Your writing is amazing! I love your metaphors, and descriptions.

Posted 13 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.


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