I Just Hoped

I hope you enjoy this song I've just wrote.

I fall apart when somebody mentions your name,

Because I live with the fact that you don’t feel the same,

I’m dying more with every second that begins to pass,

Because I’m thinking about our kiss upon that bright green grass,

And I just hoped that one day you would have been my girl,

And I would have screamed it from the rooftops and to the world.

I hate to wake up from my dreams because reality is worse,

I don’t know what is wrong with me, it’s like I’ve got a curse,

Everybody that I get I push them away from me,

It’s like I’m scared to fall in love or let them see the real me,

What do I do when I get hurt? I should be used to it,

But it hurts so much when our crumbles and then bit by bit,

The spark in my heart begins to die and vanish in the air,

I wish that it wouldn’t and I wish that I didn’t care.

But the truth is,

I fall apart when somebody mentions your name,

Because I live with the fact that you don’t feel the same,

I’m dying more with every second that begins to pass,

Because I’m thinking about our kiss upon that bright green grass,

And I just hoped that one day you would have been my girl,

And I would have screamed it from the rooftops and to the world.

The hardest part of saying goodbye is doing it every day,

And I do it all the time because I push people away,

I need the strength to fight and the strength to smile,

I need to find somebody that’s going to stay a while,

Cause I just wanna be happy and live my life to the full,

Not living in a dream world or constantly feeling dull,

But now the spark in my heart begins to die and vanish in the air,

I wish that it wouldn’t and I wish that I didn’t care.

But the truth is,

I fall apart when somebody mentions your name,

Because I live with the fact that you don’t feel the same,

I’m dying more with every second that begins to pass,

Because I’m thinking about our kiss upon that bright green grass,

And I just hoped that one day you would have been my girl,

And I would have screamed it from the rooftops and to the world.

I think about you all day and every night,

I wonder if you still think of me as your guiding light,

I don’t know what I did but it still pushed you away,

I just want you to come back not forever but forever and a day.

Cause the truth is,

I fall apart when somebody mentions your name,

Because I live with the fact that you don’t feel the same,

I’m dying more with every second that begins to pass,

Because I’m thinking about our kiss upon that bright green grass,

And I just hoped that one day you would have been my girl,

And I would have screamed it from the rooftops and to the world.

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Not bad. Some of your imagery is a little stale, but overall, you've managed to tell the story fairly well. There's obviously a lot of emotion behind this, and I'd just caution you to always put the art first. I think you've done that for the most part here, but there are certain elements that lose a little because you'd lost track of that. Overall, well done.