Going Down

This is my first poem ever.So read this and give me your feedback.

I have reached the point in my life
where my life cant be dented
further.I am in a position where
I have to take my last stand.

I gained vital experiences in my life
in a very cruel manner.I will not
forget those things I have learned
forever.Now its time you learn some.

I am going to fear no more,as I have
seen fear to all extents.believe me
taste of fear is really bitter and one
will never like to taste it again in life.

I feel like the dormant powers in me
have been invoked at last.I am on a
complete rage,my eyes can focus
my target with precision.It is time.....

Reviews

[vspjaguar]

Since this is your first attempt,I will review your piece as a reader not as a critique.

I like the feel of this poem.This is a poem about how have been let down in life and how you are fighting to stand up with rage.I like the line which says "my eyes can focus my target with precision". It adds up with the rage.

Nice job for your first poem,keep up the good work.

[imdvader]

thanks for your encouragement.. I will be writing more in the future..

[LadyInk]

Wow!

[imdvader]

thanks! :)

[rnuff]

I like this, written well and expressed well.

[imdvader]

Thanks a lot!

[The Dreamer]

this one is great for a first!! :) the last para was very good.

[imdvader]

Thanks a lot for the encouragement..