A poem my 7th grade crush wrote me.

A poem my 7th grade crush wrote me.

A Poem by Ryan Henderson
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A little poem that my seventh grade crush wrote me, it is a fantasy poem, I like it :D

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One by one, the white rose petals open.
My daily torture is now past.
Like an endless stream of dreams about you, our time flows into silence.
When I am lost on my short path, you are my guiding light.

Your smile dissolved the cloudiness in my heart.
How many pieces are forgotten like a dream?
Even if the setting sun were to take away this moment,
Our two hearts overlap.

My feelings for you have limitless depth,
It is truly like destiny in my hands.
Grasping you again and again; Losing you again and again
And so by chance we meet again.

My heart longs for you, just like the flowers long for rain.
The night makes today into tonight,
I wish that our two hearts were one
This is what I wish so hard for.

One by one, the white rose petals scatter over time.
My feelings for you will never fade.

© 2014 Ryan Henderson


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Ryan Henderson
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I admit, I had to read this one several times, and am still noticing little things... I really like the way this one feels dark, yet romantic and dreamy... can feel heaviness, yet enchanting breeze fluttering throughout.. the flow is beautiful and depth is moving... have yet to figure out link between what I interpret from writing and the title, but I like when writers make me think... and when they can also make me FEEL, like this one did, then it is pretty darn awesome!.. well done!

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ryan Henderson

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reading it and I'm glad you liked it!
AprilRN1210

5 Years Ago

you're welcome, it was my pleasure..



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a 7th grader seriously wrote this? thats really good. I liked this.

Posted 5 Years Ago


wow. just--- wow. i like the part where she wrote :'... grasping you again and again; losing you again and again.' maybe because i can relate though.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ryan Henderson

5 Years Ago

lol I'm glad you liked it, thanks for the review!
7th grader wrote this? my word, its brilliant! The feeling of tenderness and closeness both come through strongly in this piece.
Great work :) cheers

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ryan Henderson

5 Years Ago

Thanks for the review!
It is really a beautiful piece! Wow! The feeling of love is a journey with many ups and downs... but in the end, all that matters is how you feel towards that one person. I think this poem nailed this concept. Beautifully written. :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ryan Henderson

5 Years Ago

Thank you for the review!
Really nice with hints of darkness. Love it.

Posted 5 Years Ago


This is well written. It has some sort of dark thing going on behind the romance and I love that. Keep up the good work. :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Wow! That is so sweet that she wrote it for you:)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ryan Henderson

5 Years Ago

Yeah, thank you for the review!
Cool Girl

5 Years Ago

you are so very welcome:)
I love this poem, it seems like it was kinda wrote like 'I know I'm going to die soon' sorta way if you think about it, but everything to me a can trace towards death so anyways it was rly good and rly romantic. :P

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ryan Henderson

5 Years Ago

lol thank you for the review! That girl always was sort of suicidal, so it seems like the way you in.. read more
I really like the feel of this one man, its dark romance theme is really appealing!
The imagery is flawless and each sentence flows effortlessly into the next.
Fantastic work dude, keep it up!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ryan Henderson

5 Years Ago

Thank you, BlankCypher!
I really like this. It`s hauntingly sweet.

The author seems really hopeful, devoted and protective. At the same time, she (?) doesn`t seem to be afraid of the consequences that time, death and destiny can bring into a relationship.

She once suffered with time ("My daily torture is now past"), and she is not afraid of destiny because she feels like she can control it ("It is truly like destiny in my hands ") and now she knows she doesn`t need to fear it anymore. She is no longer worried about loss (death?) because she knows they will meet again, ("Grasping you again and again; Losing you again and again/And so by chance we meet again.")

And since the author has learned to cope with all of this, she will wait, patiently for her loved one ("One by one, the white rose petals scatter over time / My feelings for you will never fade")

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ryan Henderson

5 Years Ago

My, my Mabel, you certainly know how to interpret poetry! When the girl who sent me this gave it to .. read more

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Added on September 17, 2014
Last Updated on December 19, 2014
Tags: Dark, Fantasy, Love, Cool, Crush

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Ryan Henderson

Cobourg, Ontario, Canada



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