When Things Are Grim

When Things Are Grim

A Poem by Ryan Henderson
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A little poem I have written to pick you up when things are grim.

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I'm searching through emptiness,


Try to forget the torture in vain,


The shadow cast by the dark setting sun,


Will bring my sadness to an end.


My consciousness cries out


Through the fear and the doubt.


My words are dying in the night.


No darkness lasts forever.


When the scars of the past,


still live in your veins,


Sit back, light the match,


And watch the past burn down in flames.

© 2014 Ryan Henderson


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Ryan Henderson
Please tell me what you think :)

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"Sit back, light the match
And watch the past burn down in flames."
These were my favourite lines of the poem. It has a perfect rhythm, strong imagery, and interesting meaning. I liked the whole poem, though it's hard to understand exactly what the meaning is. It seems the narrator switches between being hopeful that his darkness will go away and to falling into despair that it will be there forever. I like this technique, even if it wasn't intentional. That's kind of how it is when you're depressed, sometimes you feel you'll push through and other times you feel it will never end.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ryan Henderson

5 Years Ago

Thanks for the review! I meant for the mood to change like that :)


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oh gosh heheh that's amazing

Posted 3 Years Ago


"Sit back, light the match
And watch the past burn down in flames."
These were my favourite lines of the poem. It has a perfect rhythm, strong imagery, and interesting meaning. I liked the whole poem, though it's hard to understand exactly what the meaning is. It seems the narrator switches between being hopeful that his darkness will go away and to falling into despair that it will be there forever. I like this technique, even if it wasn't intentional. That's kind of how it is when you're depressed, sometimes you feel you'll push through and other times you feel it will never end.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ryan Henderson

5 Years Ago

Thanks for the review! I meant for the mood to change like that :)
That was enchanting, entrancing like that fire in the end that cleanses and heals.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ryan Henderson

5 Years Ago

Thanks for taking the time to review!
Those last two lines are very satisfying on some internal level. I needed this, thank you. Brilliant write.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ryan Henderson

5 Years Ago

Thanks for the review!
Wow this was deep! Your words flowed very smoothly. I recently just started writing poetry so check out my work if you'd like! I will happily accept any feedback.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Your ending is very good. It pulls the whole thing together I think. Well done, Grace :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Great write thanks for sharing.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ryan Henderson

5 Years Ago

Thanks for the review!
Brief yet powerful ! true to the description you have given to the piece!
Favorite line:
Sit back, light the match,

And watch the past burn down in flames.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ryan Henderson

5 Years Ago

Thanks for the review!
Roshan Nair

5 Years Ago

do check out my page. id highly appreciate your views on it
I really like how many different ways this poem can be interpreted, it can be seen as positive or negative which is truly magical.

"My consciousness cries out

Through the fear and the doubt." - Adore this line, keep up the good work!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ryan Henderson

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much!
Wow this is really good. I think a lot of people can rate to this.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ryan Henderson

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much!

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Ryan Henderson
Ryan Henderson

Cobourg, Ontario, Canada



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