Alone

I'm not a poet, an author, or that great;

but i know what it feels like when you take the bait;

you fall for someone and they fall right back;

and then much too soon your forced to go and pack;

We all make mistakes and we all believe a lie;

holding onto the past only makes us want to cry; 

Its hard to let go and its hard to move along;

all those people out there goofin around, singin their own song;

Some of us are like them, tryin to ignore the pain; 

Some of us just go around pretendin life is but a game;

But the fame and the games could never hope to contain;

Inside of every single one of there sits a waiting flame;

We all dream, we all hope, and even sometimes desire

to reach down inside and put a spark to that fire;

We all at some point want to make a change in the world;

and everybody wants to see their own flag unfurled;

So what happens when we fall and we find ourselves on the ground?

What do we do when all we do is stepped on and pound?

Think about what happens when you have nothing left.

Be prepared for the trials and know what to do when your a mess.

If you are depressed, scared, or confused;

Understand that there are some people who would lose

anything to make you happy, do anything to make you glad;

and if you have those people in your life things wont be all that bad.

This is just a piece of work from a normal guy like me,

I'm not a poet and this poem might be a catastrophe.

But remember what I said and try to understand,

When you fall down, reach up and grab your friend's hand.

Author's Note

I have never written a poem before and this was the best I have done. If this was helpful to you, I'm glad.

Reviews

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You have nailed the sentiment behind all the games of love David and you certainly acknowledge it at the end of stanza three: "Inside of every single one of there sits a waiting flame;". We all have flames inside of us waiting to be stoked with the love of another. While your piece speaks of issues we face when we rush in, or someone else sees it as a game, or we fall, there is also a great deal of hope left for us in your last line: "When you fall down, reach up and grab your friend's hand." If we surround ourselves with family and friends then we can be a little more content as we patiently wait to find someone to share our passions with, A good first poem indeed.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

The message is fantastic. The grammar and spelling is terrible with some editing you really have something here.

[Jetta Zippora]

Wow. What a powerful and inspirational poem! I can relate to every word and it is all so vivid the way you express your thoughts. Amazing write :) You are a talented writer, friend. I find your writing voice unique and perfectly rhythmic.

[Not here]

Thanks alot :) and i like your profile pic

[iveltac]

Good job. You don have to have practice to be good. Your poems are nice and some are relaxing.

/keep up the good work.

[Wordsmith_Artemis]

This is a fantastic piece of work. Keep at it and I'm not so sure your aspirations are going to be too far off. I definitely feel there's more greatness here than you give yourself credit for. And the message is both inspiring and has a strong sense of passion behind it. It's also nice to find work that's so universal and relatable. To anyone and everyone.

[Confuser]

I think it is such beautiful sentiment and very, very well said. I love the poem and think you will be a wonderful writer with a bright future. Thank you so much. Bravo. Dale

[Raja Anjana Kothapalli]

You have done an excellent job poem for your first poem dear friend! I love it. It was deep, emotional, hearttouching and beautiful! Thanks for sharing! Have a great day!
-Anjana

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Well this is fantastic work.......
very well written......
beautiful message.....
i loved it!!!
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[Roshan Nair]

For a first go at poetry, you've pretty much stuck the landing my friend :) great write. I can completely empathize with the thoughts you've penned down. cheers

[Lavender Soya]

Hello David,

This one's a very humble and sincere composition. I love how the elements agree with each other. The wonderful message was conveyed through smooth flowing lines. Furthermore, you have a good choice of words. Keep writing! :-)

[ARevenantKingdom [ARK]]

This is fantastic and inspiring. I couldn't believe it when I got to the author's note and saw it was really your first poem. The message was great. I especially liked the stanza starting with "we all dream" and ending with "flag unfurled." You captured a wide range of emotions in a short piece.

[Not here]

hey I've written alot of poems since this one. if you check them out please tell me what you think :) thanks