Breakthrough

Breakthrough

A Poem by Not here
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What do you think? I'm trying to get back into my groove.

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What do you call this? 
A breakup or a breakthrough?
A bulls-eye or a big miss?
A broken record or just new?

Some say I'm a masterpiece,
I just smile at their flattery.
Some say I'm a big disaster,
so why do they stay long after?

Emotions like fuel running through my veins;
Try to hold me down but it won't sway
my furious funneling of fearlessness for
anything that stands in my way. I'll bust down the door. 

I could be what I choose, when I choose, how I say it.
I'm tired of living in fear, hiding from daytime.
It's about time, overdue time, that I start rhymes
instead of sitting around, it's time I say it and spray it.

Rhyme schemes? Forget rhyme schemes.
This is my time, I'm my own king.
I roll through, just bowl through
any pin in my own road too.

Cold days, I just roll plays;
see Shakespeare, in his old years?
Didn't slow down, didn't take a bow,
until all of his work was finished. "Wow!"

Now me here, I'm no Picasso,
even if my work's similar as snow.
Snow flakes are just milkshakes
on steroids without all the taste.
But they're all so unique you say?
Just like my works I referenced, aye?

Agree? Disagree? Somewhere in the middle?
I'm sorry I can't argue with you or even piddle.
I got work to do, things to write, stuff to see.
Places to be, if you know what I mean.

So give me that mic, that pike, that stick.
Watch me stick the landing jumping out of this pit.
It's time for a breakthrough with a little bit catastrophe.
See ya when I land, but for now, this is all Me.

© 2015 Not here


Author's Note

Not here
Getting back into my groove required a breakthrough.

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I really loved this piece. Has a great flow to it. Is it a rap, by chance? Because it runs like one, and I loved that about it.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Not here

5 Years Ago

yes i intended it to be a rap :) thank you. i appreciate it.
Wordsmith_Artemis

3 Years Ago

You bet! It's an excellent piece :)
Good job, the only mistake I see in it, is you forgot to capitalize the "I" in the last line in the fourth stanza, in the phrase "it's time i say it and spray it." Overall great job!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Not here

6 Years Ago

okay thanks ill fix that :) your the first one to notice it. and i appreciate your reviews
Coming of age with spoken words
Chattering with constant contrasts

Posted 6 Years Ago


Not here

6 Years Ago

thank you for reviewing josie :)
Wow! Really nice.. and I liked how you have used two contrasting views of people about the same person.. it is a really nice poem. Good work. :)


Posted 6 Years Ago


Not here

6 Years Ago

thanks i appreciate it
Moonlight

6 Years Ago

You are welcome!
very beautiful, and nicely worded.

Posted 6 Years Ago


I like this stubborn little piece bit much of an overuse of the comma though could use some editing

Posted 6 Years Ago


Not here

6 Years Ago

Thanks :) I appreciate you reviewing my work
This is pretty good! Keep up the good work! Would like to read some more of your work sometime! :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Sunny

6 Years Ago

I will check them out sometime
Not here

6 Years Ago

ok thanks :)
Sunny

6 Years Ago

Yeah No problem!! :D
you have a really good flow a few bits are a little rough maybe a syllable off but definitely could tell this was a rap before you even mentioned anything. very good. u had some clever and original lines throughout :)

Snow flakes are just milkshakes
on steroids without all the taste.

^ love this


Posted 6 Years Ago


Not here

6 Years Ago

if you can make a few jokes about ____ is just ____ on steroids, they are the funniest things ever!!.. read more
Brilliant comparisons and visuals. I really enjoyed it...looks like you're in the groove :-)

Posted 6 Years Ago


This is great, I love it, so strong and vivid.

Posted 6 Years Ago



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Added on February 28, 2015
Last Updated on September 17, 2015
Tags: Breakups, Comebacks, Love, Contentness

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