Tempest of Thoughts

Tempest of Thoughts

A Poem by David Kwaku

The sea rides the waves as tempers flare.
Every angle, forces act against the mind of his severity.
Who should I be? Who shouldn't I be?
Let every wind gash flames of terror upon his soul,
so it may devour his thoughts.
The clouds leak water that freeze into stones,
stomping through the dense atmosphere.
In his heart it form craters, each is a scar of hate,
and a fist knock of heartbreak.
Quietly he speaks...Who goes there?
It is thy enemy, who has come from far to bury thee.
He panics, trying to escape.
No window, corners without shadows to hide.
He feels the strangers presence, he screams...stay back.
Veins rip through his mental state,
every emotion from his heart circulate back and forth.
He faint in the deep ocean of his tears,
as lightning strikes volts of pain into his spines.
His scream was the thunder afterwards.

© 2012 David Kwaku

Author's Note

David Kwaku
haven't been on here for a while, been busy with exams. I leave you with this poetry.
Hope you enjoy it

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I love the way you combine the building storm with his thoughts. Wonderful write, really. Sometimes, our vices and enemies get the best of us in the storm. But sometimes, we're lucky enough to make it through and see brighter days ahead. Great job!

Posted 10 Years Ago

Interesting, great mix between nature and feelings, one overwhelming the other

Posted 10 Years Ago

Your expressions are great and yet it's that last line I love the most.. very strong..in feeling..xo

Posted 11 Years Ago

A fierce sense of belonging crashes through here, well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Your thoughts are quite strong in essense. I liked this piece very much. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago

I hope you are happy to receive constructive criticism?

There are some really good descriptive lines here and great storytelling but sadly, spoilt a little by the grammatical errors. I do find myself somewhat distracted by errors, which is a shame when the words are good and the poem has a nice flow. A little tidying up here would make a huge difference.

Posted 11 Years Ago

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6 Reviews
Added on May 24, 2012
Last Updated on May 27, 2012
Tags: wrath, dark, anger, desperate, mistrust, storm, death


David Kwaku
David Kwaku

United Kingdom

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