Spill the Moon

Spill the Moon

A Poem by Sanober


you should be more careful,
when you move, my dear

what with you...
spilling moonlight
into my poem, with a mere...
flick of your hand,

turning massive mountains into...
flowing champagnes
of ancient haiku

your smile...splitting the skies
into a million golden
and turquoise verses

with your hair in the breeze
always leaving me scattered...
all over the place
in dewy-dreamed,
peony-cheeked
poetry-drops of you.

© 2013 Sanober


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Very well formed, this poem. It describes the moon in a poetical way, very well. A scientist once said that a scientist makes hard things easier to understand, and a poet makes easier things hard to understand. In this poem you show how easy it is to understand a scientific body such as the moon. Scientist have tried and failed for 'eons'! Well done!

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Excellent writing! Love the imagery, the format the flow, the theme. Just a gem of a write!

Posted 11 Months Ago


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This is such a beautiful poem, enchanting.
I love the easy dialogue, it draws one in like a magnet.
Thank you to Patricia for sending me a read request.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Is it the moon or the Muse that has you writing this touching piece about love? Either inspiration has worked its magic. Good write, Sanober.

Posted 2 Years Ago


This is beautiful & gracefully stated . . . I love the moon & moonlight . . . which you've turned into a playful, image-packed little story about writing a poem while some bright entity (moon, or nature, or someone who shines in your life) inspires you to the point of being deeply moved. I love all the well-crafted imagery: "spilling moonlight into my poem" . . . "massive mountains into flowing champagnes" . . . "a million golden and turquoise verses" . . . everything is so descriptive & lyrical. The last 3 lines are a crescendo of delicate & vivid imagery, celebrating your muse, this bright entity that sparks your poems to life.

Posted 3 Years Ago


This is surprisingly unique, and a great read! I mean, the whole idea of being careful not to spill the moon into your poetry, it is an idea which I have never even considered; and thinking it over, it fills my mind with a lunar-infused beauty that I don't fully understand... but that is what gives it such meaning. You have excellent prose, flowing like a surreal whisper on the wind. Thanks for Sharing!

Posted 5 Years Ago


dear Sanober... violins play when I read
your poetry. Your advising the Moon...
"to be more careful when you move, my dear".
"Turning massive mountains into... flowing
champagnes of ancient haiku" "your smile...
splitting the skies into a million golden
and turquoise verses". Every word leaves
me "dewy-dreamed, peony-cheeked
poetry-drops of you". You are as mysterious
as a peacock dancing for love. Entranced
and in awe... truly... Pat


Posted 5 Years Ago


Heavy sigh....what a splendiferously romantic write this is, Sanober. When someone can "spill moonlight" into your words and make the sky into "golden and turquoise verses", it is not magic, it is love. The imagery in this poem touches on all the senses. Wonderful work. lydi**

Posted 5 Years Ago


you're lucky to have such a beautiful muse to inspire you to write poetry. great imagery and heart-felt emotion. excellent poem.

Posted 5 Years Ago


What a lovely poem, Sanober! Each stanza is gift to your readers. I loved them all but I think my favorite is:

what with you...
spilling moonlight
into my poem, with a mere...
flick of your hand,

You are a very talented poet and I applaud you!

Posted 5 Years Ago


what vivid pictures your words have brought to my mind ,Beautiful piece

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Sanober

Mumbai, India



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