See, I am not the only one who has a depth of understanding when it comes to the broken heart. And I am not the only one who has a way with words. Elegant. Regretably beautiful. Exquisitly sad. She and I... the we that did not survive... the we that was never meant to be. Thank you. For saying things I have yet to be able to express due to the nearness of my pain.
Wow! I am lost for words this is a really great write, you put such passion in conveying your feeling. You made this a powerful viewing of a Eulogy...the heartbreak and betrayal were very emotinal. Great job!
By god, this is one powerful piece. The title and the context ar perfectly in tune. Its saddening to hear of heartbreak, your tone dictates the emptiness and disappointment you feel. I cant really pick out favourite parts, I really like all of it ! [but... Falling intoThe beginning of our end.The end of our beginnings.How sad, how devastatingly sadTo see our eternity, the promise of forever,the 'we',Turn into and end up beingJust me. Here lies she and I,-the we-That didn't survive.]
but the whole thing is real good!
This was a fabulous piece. I feel like I'm going through this right now with a friend that I thought would always be there.......such a strange feeling, this. You've captured it here brilliantly!
This is a wonderful, cleverly composed piece. I have tears in my eyes as I truly comprehend every word. It is neither nice nor easy at this point of an experience such as this.
So so difficult,
And sad it,s true,
But you have your writing,
To get you through.
I truly feel that the loss of a relationship is like a death. A complete chapter of your life, open and closed. I really did the eulogy format...nice little twist on the "death"...these lines were sick:
Hopelessly deadlocked -
Where we danced before,
We were now entangled
Loved the imagery that popped into my head as I read over those lines. Tragic and beautiful, I hope this gave you a sense of peace.
An amazing and beautiful piece. Great imagery and you put the reader into their own past memory of when the we did not last due to whatever reason it may have been. Great piece. I just had to read it over and over so I made sure I did not miss one part.
good morning (and if i don't see you again)
good afternoon/good evening
and good night:
for all interested parties -
my name is Dana.
i'm a sagittarius, if that means anything at all to you.
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