Cryptic Message

  

A fog covered dream

Of an angel bathing

In brimstone fire.

The charcoal waterfall

Offers no solution.

 

The devil watches

In wild eyed amazement

While he whispers

In my ear,

 

“Shhh…Do not tell the wizard

of that you so desire

or your requiem

will be out of tune”

 

Cryptic is his words

But deep in my soul  

I know…

 

I know therefore I fear!!!

 

Reviews

[alternative_be]

I like your very surprising use of imagenary. At first I get this very angelic, mystifying visualisation full of light ... soon to be juxtaposed by a very black vision. Reading this evokes a sense of duality. The duality of daily life, the duality of black and white, between which we are torn during the whole of our lifespan.
Like you are you writing: you know, therefore you fear...
Life can be frightening at times, that makes it so challenging and adventurous ...
I wish I could tell you to have no fear, because fear often gives you not the best of advice.
Sometimes we have to take risks in order to proceed ...
Please keep us surprising with this kind of mystifying cryptic words!

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

'i know therefore i fear' what a great ending line for this piece of writing... fantastic

[Janice Ann]

There was a sensuality to the descriptions here. It was a very short and to the point piece...and I loved it...plain and simple! Loved it!
Janice Ann

[Robert Luna]

Very interesting piece here. I love the style and the play on words as we can see something deeper in between the words seeing the truth of a truth lies there in fear itself. questioning the existence of ourselves and that we desire more then the acknowledgment of our own heart. We search for that we are and realize we question out of fear of not knowing.

Great Job!!!!!!

[Wildfleour]

We always fear that what/who we find most precious will be taken away from us. Have no fear, my friend. She's not going anywhere. :)

[An owl on the moon]

Vivid in darkness and depth, your work here draws us so quickly into the dream... You stir the emotions and mind like a wizard...

Craig

[emz]

A very thought provoking piece!.. Loved the way you set this poem out, it made it a very interesting read.
It has a very dark almost eerie feel to it and i love that.


Very well done i will need to read it a few more times to fathom it out though lol

Great job
x

[Laura E. Aranda]

Thank you for stopping by and asking me to read this one, it reminds me of David and Bathsheba in the bible.....i think that was her name. The one who bathed on the housetops...she knew what she was doing!!! Anyway maybe I was wrong but that was the impression I got reading this piece. Cheers,lea

[Nely Amorim]

this is certainly a unique piece and quite intriguing, I particularly enjoyed the first 2 stanzas... thanks for sharing :)

[ape domenigoni]

I love everything about this poem, the images it gives, the way it's written. It's beautiful, great work Cowboy :)

[Norma J. Jessee]

Dale I love puzzles, but you have me stumped ( so far ) on this one. But I will keep working at it till I come up something. I love what you have done here. It is fantastic . I somehow feel the answer lies within good and evil. don't let anyone know what you're thinking or planning or they will divise a way to put a stop to it.

Brilliant Dale Brilliant.
Love it.