Hell Comes Home

Be careful what you wish for cause the devil may be listening

Buildings set a blaze

and houses burn in shame

as a city crumbles

from one man’s mistakes.

 

To deal with the devil

always comes a price

people running for cover

with nowhere to hide.

 

Years it took to build

but within minutes

all the history has become

nothing but soot and ash.

 

Thought he was right

letting his heart guide

but now the soul is gone

with a million lives.

 

So welcome to the new city

built with the finest brimstone

from the deepest part of the mind

of a lonely, brilliant fool.

Reviews

[BBP]

Had me set back in a western town, really liked this one. Gave a full depth story with minimal words... my favorite kind.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well thank you for that delightful review.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Hell comes Home'
Rock n Roll Cowboy'
The biblical phrase, "As a man thinks in his heart so is he," comes to mind as I read your above poem. Another is, "A man shall reap what he sows." Our really are a depiction of what is brewing within our inner world.What do we think about, dwell on, imagine. It all has to materialize in our actions and decisions eventually.
Good Work!
Kathy

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I really appreciate your interpretation of my poem. Thank you so much for sharing.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Yes, you are so right and I guess everything we see and experience is processed and interpreted and you are most welcome!

[Tina Kline]

Great descriptions, I could imagine the scene as I read it. Sometimes getting what you want isn't what you really wanted after all. I like this one a lot too!

[Bethany Woody]

Wonderful descriptions. Reminds me a bit of Sept. 11th. How with different decisions we may have been able to stop it all. But the messag here is an important one. Actions have concequences and you must be ready to deal with them becaue they will always find you. Great write.

[Sheila Kline]

Wow....not a place I want to be in!! Very descriptive and bone chilling Dale D!....superb ending!
You have been able to describe the woes of evil like a ghost running through the cemetery!

[O!]

Your description gave me the chills!

I love the lonely, brilliant fool.............that line just jumps out and makes an excellent finish to the poem.

You're going deep Dale!

x,
O!

[Morgan A Lynch]

very nicley done..

[Lori]

I love the harsh metaphor of the fiery destruction. I also think that almost everyone can relate to this at some point in his/her life.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Nicely done, Cowboy, seems like how my life is sometimes. Enjoyed this.


Great Write.
Rayne