Deserted Revelation

 

A distant echo cried

Over a strange desert plain;

Lost in the nothing,

Like forgotten dreams.

 

My soul felt like

The infinite night sky;

My heart the stars,

Seen after long burned out.

 

Walking down memory lane

Towards the hypnotic wailing

In my own shoes

That don’t seem to fit

I knew I must recognize the signs,

For this journey couldn’t be retraced

Cause the breadcrumbs I left

Sank deep in the mud.

 

Taking in the sight of the lush greenery,

Enjoying the mist of the cool crisp air

Tantalize my pores, refreshing my imagination

I walked the nurturing road

Knowing soon I will risk turning to dust

Trudging a barren land in search of why

My vocals chose to roam alone.

 

Days of sun baked searching

Produced a question as parched

As my aching body becoming one

With the unforgiving terrain.

Then with one big swallow of sand

I finally realized the truth…

 

If my voice doesn’t seek

Then I shall never find.

Suddenly becoming dust in the wind

Was a hopeful destiny.

 

 

 

Reviews

[Seriana]

Dale, you seem like a man on a journey itself. I've noticed a transition in your writing that expresses just that. It is wonderful to see a transformation in your life spelled out in your words. I like the depth. It shows character and a tough spirit. :)
Thank you for openly sharing your words. They continue to inspire. :)

[MagiCrystal]

Dellito.. Lately you have got the magic..100 % magical
Should I say...this is the most profound poem lately..but.. you are amazing

[An Ordinary Woman]

Nothing saves as quite like hope. I'm so glad you found yours. :)

[Belinda Rice]

I am very happy to see you still writing and this piece is a wonderful piece I really love it and I hope to see more of your writing I know I have not been on in so so many months but I miss reading all your work for it is incredible .....very well written and said..G/B

[Ellen Hammond]

Love the analogies, metaphors, and deep thoughts in this piece! You have taken us on a soul's journey through life, ending with a revelation. We may each relate to this differently but I have no doubt we will all carry a piece of it in our hearts. Well done, my friend!

[BirlenCockatiel]

lovely. i really hope he found his way home!

[Sheila Kline]

Your reflective passion burns brightly as you seek answers to questions, and then it is like you have experienced an ephinay with the last verse! There are many lines that jump out at me, but the ending is that which I shall remember, as it gives purpose to life! Yes, we must speak and seek to find!
Wonderful write!!

[closed account]

I wanted to copy and paste my favorite parts of this poem
but found my self highlighting the whole thing!! lol so I am going to post
my favortes

For this journey couldn’t be retraced
Cause the breadcrumbs I left
Sank deep in the mud.

the bread crumbs (your legacy)
sank deep in the mud (no signs of your exsistence)
so profound, this was masterful... so beautifully written
I really can't say enough, so much honesty as if you just
kept writing and writing effortless!!

[Ladysue]

This was exquisite writing. Your descriptions are very vivid. A very insightful, strong and beautiful piece that makes one ponder. The last stanza really makes an impact on the reader and the word Suddenly really hits home. Excellent...