To Love Thy Lady Shakespearian Style

A fun attempt at a different style.

 

To truly love one's soul fully

Is to let your passion burn

Like eternity has come and gone,

Appreciate every ounce of beauty

Flowing from thee truest one’s heart,

Memorize every line, curve, smile

So when separated by miles

They are never more then a blink away.

Let not false distractions

Of mundane duties nor flesh of strangers

Cast sins upon your heavenly devotion,

Layin' it to rest in the depths of hell.

For when the one

That brings out heaven within

Thy heart like a prayer answered

They should be worshiped not forsaken

Or life shall become a self-purgatory.

 

 

Reviews

[Hustle Consciousness]

It sounds like what to do with a great love once u find it you hold on to it treat as if the best thing u cant live without however for if "forsaken ....life will become a self purgatory" Powerful poem! It touches on many levels of what language used to be about when the language was love such as Romeo and Juilet!

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this is the food of love..a magical way in verse..and I for one love it..

[Sheila Kline]

Beautiful, just beautiful! I always love Shakespeare, and you have certainly taken such a time endured style and created a lovely work!
This is certainly different than your usual style of writing, but I like it........well, I LOVE IT!
You have managed to maintain its musical flow with expertise!

[Ruth]

Great use of wording love, different and really good :) I like it a lot :)
I adore the ending of this too, sums the poem up so well :)
Excellent work
xx

[SM Davis]

Love it! Can I make one suggestion? You have "thee" in spots and "your" in others..."thee" "thine" "thou" "didst" "spake". I love that you are branching out. Keep it up!! :0)

[Wildfleour]

To make oneself so vulnerable is so scary and yet can bring the greatest reward life has to offer.

[Marie Harrison]

So romantic! Does love like this even exist?

[Ladysue]

oh Dale, this was so well expressed. I love the tone, the wording and the wonderful devotion and message within. So beautiful and moving. Truly a wonderful piece!

[emmajoy]

Dale, this is very different for you and you've done it so well .. you've gone back to the time when language was musical and love could be sublime ..

'Let not false distractions
Of mundane duties nor flesh of strangers
Cast sins upon your heavenly devotion,'

Now there's a touch of times past .. can hear it said .. and then, these gentle but emotional words,

'That brings out heaven within
Thy heart like a prayer answered
They should be worshiped not forsaken
Or life shall become a self-purgatory.

More!

[Ferg]

how victorian of you!!

[The Analog Kid]

That last line is great! I like the slightly lofty style. "Memorize every line, curve, smile/So when separated by miles/They are never more then a blink away." ...beautiful...