My Knight

M y knight in shining armor, came rushing around the pool table

Y ou caught me in mid air as I collapsed into your arms

 

K ept me from falling and hitting the bar room floor as I fainted

N o one but you would have caught me like that
I  was so intoxicated that I could barely stand on my own two feet
G ot too involved with Jose Cuervo and lost my sense of balance

H eaven knows you became the one who rescued me

T he night I so clumsily made a fool of myself in front of you

 

 

Reviews

[Bennett Logan]

I've tangoed with Mr. Cuervo a few times, myself. He's a jackass that makes me do terrible things like spend all my money on shots for the whole bar, singing karaoke, and the worshipping of false white-porcelain bathroom gods. Yup. I've got a bone to pick with that guy.

[Kenny L. Mitchell]

Acrostics rock! Very clever. I like it!

[Valentine]

This was so funny, I could just imagine it happening..God bless and very well done..Valentine

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Well Done Poet Well Done!!!!!

[bookworm94]

hehehehe This poem is really funny. I enjoyed reading it.

[K.D.Storm]

This poem seems very light hearted and sweet.

[Sean M. Addams]

the imagery in this piece is just breath taking to me .... overall a very powerful write... nice job on this one...

[Anne Martin]

I confess to not being a particular fan of acrostic poetry. Most people get stuck with the word form and lose the flow between lines. This suffers a little in that respect, but not too badly. One thing that you have done, however, is switch from referring to him in third person in the first line, and then in second person in the rest of the poem. That confuses things a lot. I'm not sure about the Jose Quervo reference - I don't know who he is. Maybe you meant Cuervo, which is tequila. I assume that is what you meant, referring to the intoxication.

Otherwise, I think repetition of "My Knight in Shining Armor" is unnecessary in such a short poem. You should probably reconsider the first instance, since it is sort of the punch line later.

Hope that helps.