Day One

Day One

A Story by Phillitup
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I wrote this because, I'm not sure I just felt like it. Sorry I'm not on much and when I am I remain hidden, not reading or reviewing. I'm just rather busy. Thanks.

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Well, here I am. Open to another blank page in my journal. The type of journal I collect to write in but never do because I don't feel like it's good enough or whatever. I guess my life is like this blank page, which isn't so blank anymore. Every minute, what I do in my life appears as if on a fresh page in my "journal of life". Still, I'm left to wonder if I'm merely a character in someone else's story. Just a made up person in their head in a world that, despite what they may think, they will NEVER know about. That's it, isn't it? How much us writers strive to know that we are aware of what lurks in the farthest corners of our characters world and mind. But we don't really. We reject things because the main character can't die off, especially in a series. The world wouldn't accept that, they couldn't handle it. Still, here I am saying that it's time for a revolution of writers to begin. No matter how much we hate a story with a cliffhanger ending or when your favorite person dies, we must face the truth. Things just don't happen that way in life. Just because someone is a main character does not mean that they are invincible. It doesn't mean that they always win. We must conquer the true story! So revolt, fellow creators! Join me in this revolution!

© 2013 Phillitup


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Phillitup
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I love the line: 'I'm left to wonder if I'm merely a character in someone else's story. Just a made up person in their head in a world that, despite what they may think, they will NEVER know about.' That's a profound thought.

Then you continue with: 'That's it isn't it? How much us writers strive to know that we are aware of what lurks in the farthest corners of our character's world and mind. But we don't, really.' Sometimes the truth hurts.

Moving on: ' We reject things because the main character can't die off; especially in a series. The world won't accept that; they can't handle it.' You are on to something.

Then you reach the climax: '--- we must face the truth. Things don't always happen that way in life. Just because someone is a main character does not mean that they are invincible. It doesn't mean they always win.' Point well made.

Anti climax - Challenge: 'We must conquer the true story! So revolt, fellow creators (writers)! Join me in this revolution!' Sign me up.

I believe that part of the problem is that a lot of readers are lazy. We have become a society of people who desire instant gratification. Look at the size of books; don't see many 'Gone With The Wind' size published these days. Consider the length of plays: three acts is about the limit. And if you don't hook a reader with the first sentence or two, they loose interest. Unfortunately we write for a society easily bored and obsessed with fantasy rather than reality. But I'm willing to join you in 'conquering the true story.'

This is a very mature observation and challenge; great job. Thanks for sharing it with us.



Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Phillitup

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much! I appreciate the review. I thought it was an interesting concept. I'd love to be .. read more



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I love the line: 'I'm left to wonder if I'm merely a character in someone else's story. Just a made up person in their head in a world that, despite what they may think, they will NEVER know about.' That's a profound thought.

Then you continue with: 'That's it isn't it? How much us writers strive to know that we are aware of what lurks in the farthest corners of our character's world and mind. But we don't, really.' Sometimes the truth hurts.

Moving on: ' We reject things because the main character can't die off; especially in a series. The world won't accept that; they can't handle it.' You are on to something.

Then you reach the climax: '--- we must face the truth. Things don't always happen that way in life. Just because someone is a main character does not mean that they are invincible. It doesn't mean they always win.' Point well made.

Anti climax - Challenge: 'We must conquer the true story! So revolt, fellow creators (writers)! Join me in this revolution!' Sign me up.

I believe that part of the problem is that a lot of readers are lazy. We have become a society of people who desire instant gratification. Look at the size of books; don't see many 'Gone With The Wind' size published these days. Consider the length of plays: three acts is about the limit. And if you don't hook a reader with the first sentence or two, they loose interest. Unfortunately we write for a society easily bored and obsessed with fantasy rather than reality. But I'm willing to join you in 'conquering the true story.'

This is a very mature observation and challenge; great job. Thanks for sharing it with us.



Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Phillitup

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much! I appreciate the review. I thought it was an interesting concept. I'd love to be .. read more
I like the mindset. A few little things I learned from others editing my own work. Get rid of the word "that" if you can. The sentence reads stronger without it. It is a fact I am fighting to learn. Also, "characters" needs to be *character's*.
Try this out as well, "Just because someone is a main character does not mean" (*drop 'that'*) "they are invincible" (*link the next sentence here*) nor will this character "always win."
Glad to see you pushing your mind to new thoughts.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

 David Scott

6 Years Ago

It is easier to see when I have to correct the same thing in my won work every time I sit down to wr.. read more
Phillitup

6 Years Ago

I really actually appreciate tips like this because it makes me feel as if people actually pay atten.. read more
 David Scott

6 Years Ago

I'm glad. All is well.

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