Freeze

Freeze

A Poem by Phillitup
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Not quite sure what this is, I just posted it because I haven't in a while.

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The freeze is cold

and quick

Running up and down my spine as I grab for my sweater

Fingers

so cold they can't move

Desperate

to reach

Shrinking

Shriveling

Straightening the whole world until it echoes in endless agony 

© 2013 Phillitup


Author's Note

Phillitup
Please tell me what you think, I haven't put up writing in forever and I am craving feedback. It's much appreciated and thank you for all your time.

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An intriguing poem with excellent word choice. The imagery is hard to grasp though, if it were longer that would help. I'd recommend doing so on your next poem. Other than that, I see nothing wrong with it whatsoever.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Endless agony is not good . This poem is...:)................

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Phillitup

5 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Sami Khalil

5 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)...........

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Phillitup
Phillitup

FL



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I am 14-years-old. I find inspiration all over the place: memories, ideas, things I notice. I like believing in things that others find impossible. I think that's the way I hope for a better future. .. more..

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