Ice House of Broken Gears

     My body's bloated on the tide
           Rivers of bloody tears
  My lungs are choking on Chloride
       Ice house of broken gears

     Push my body to the marrow
         Expending all my years
     Living lies with no tomorrow
     Ice house of broken gears

   Broken down to a credit score
        What life means to me 
I'm nothing but a paycheck w***e
        This life is failing me

 Constructing damaged alternates
       Running on angry fears
    Frustration always incubates
    Ice house of broken gears

  Thrown to corrupted legal men
           A jury of my peers
    Prosecutors unleashed again
     Ice house of broken gears

   Dragged into a broken system
     designed to make me pay
     Turning me into a victim
    They took my pride away

  Always running the tilt a whirl
   Sick clowns with ugly leers
 Watching life sink down a swirl
   Ice house of broken gears

Reviews

[Lady Ra]

Great poem. There was a wonderful lecture by a woman named Dr. Clarissa Pinkola Estes - the lecture was called "The Boy Who Married an Eagle." In the lecture she speaks about how men are treated in this culture as if they do not feel, but men have all kinds of feelings; all kinds of hopes and dreams. Men in this culture are taught to work themselves to the grave. And now women are too in addition to raising children. This is a marvelous poem. Very brave and eloquent.

Ra

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Lady Ra. I appreciate your input.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

What is this?!... you have morphed into something epic my friend!
I love the intensity of this piece! You are truly branching out, Baby! Amazing write!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Robbie.

[Shaker Loopz]

Very interesting. Also highly relatable. I understand your frustration, but without our troubles we would have nothing to guide us. One of life's greatest messages. Surely one of my favorites.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Shaker

[Pollai]

Damn baby, damn. I was impressed by the second stanza, the rest was just icing on top. You went all out, or maybe you didn't have to because the flow is so effortless and it looks like you penned this while in the "zone", where everything you write just clicks. The buildup is great and the vocab exquisite. Good work BR, keep em coming.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Pollai

[Baby Ricochet]

BR, this is so good. You really got into this one, and worded exactly how frustration can grow, as almost a cancer into a mind... pardon this metaphor, but it's exactly how I felt it. (and that's cause you're good to bring over the exact feeling in this poem). Excellent write.

- Elisa

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Elisa

[Angi]

I was browsing around and came across this piece, Baby. Wow is the first thing that came to mind. The unstopping hits just keep rolling on through. Sometimes life takes a big old turn towards Suckville, eh? You gotta just keep on standing up! Angi~

[Baby Ricochet]

For sure. Thank you Angi

[Angi]

My pleasure, Baby.

[Souladareatease]

excellence is this fine write, carved in real and inked with blood--Pure poetry emotive motion

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you soul. Trouble is I can't top it so I've been writing funny and dirty lately. That's okay for awhile but eventually I'll just be ol dirty Ricochet if I keep it up.

[Souladareatease]

hahaha yes those ruts happen...You'll top it when You don't know You are...dirty and funny have their rightful art too:)

[lee von cleef]

just like that, well done.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you cleef

[Aka.Hipster]

an interesting writing to read. I like this a lot

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you ISH

[dw817]

Big boys don't cry - big boys don't cry ... but oh YES, they most certainly do - and while they may try and hide it from others - there is nothing - absolutely nothing wrong with Big Boys Crying ...

But, just like a woman, these tears need to be saved for when they are needed most. As boys by definition of society, we are supposed to be stronger than girls, and we are supposed to be able to take more punishment and pain.

Me ? I never did believe what society said or dictated or expected of me - so I went by my own rules, never being quite a boy - and never being quite a girl - somewhere in-between that emotional balance. :)

[Baby Ricochet]

"not quite boy not quite girl" Interesting. I believe the best balanced psyche is an androgynous one, as feminine as it is masculine. Unfortunately I'm not that balanced and I wouldn't know where to start to go about finding that equilibrium. I really would like to though.

[dw817]

Gotta watch a lotta Barbie movies. Lemme know when you get that far ! :3

[Baby Ricochet]

Maybe I'll try sensitive poetry first.

[dw817]

Well when you've done that you totally gotta see, "Barbie The Princess & The Pauper," the singing and music in that is so pretty and they do this wonderful duet together !