Exhaust

Exhaust

A Poem by demureminds

Tell me

do my eyes still light up

at the glance

of lit fire

heaving tranced-like 

state of a bond sired?

Do my lips still part

slightly 

in awe of specimen

and spilling thawed

words not out of 

intention?

Has my tongue breeched 

the sea that used to rock

us 

into a sway of oohs and ahhs

gone now

with the night's last

ooh laas?

© 2013 demureminds


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Wonderful use of vocabulary and expressions to tease out some answers which you may have fathomed out for yourself already, very good indeed

Posted 8 Years Ago


demureminds

8 Years Ago

Thanks! (:
I like the questioning tone of the piece. You aren't quite certain the answers, but are willing to test it. As you yourself have said, ooh laa. I like the ending of this piece, it was mesmerizing and perfect.

Posted 8 Years Ago


demureminds

8 Years Ago

Thank you (:

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demureminds
demureminds

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A Poem by demureminds