Tango

Let's tango,
                         until all your doubts disappear,
until you dissolve in the rush of the chase.
I'm waiting,
                         a shadowy shape in the mirror
in which you sometimes recognize your own face:
the visions of sins
                         that supply your anguish,
the jasmine-tinged dreams
                         that you cannot banish,
the urgency so severe
                         it hurts,
the silence
                         because there's no need for words…

 

Reviews

[RM Americano]

Sounds like the beginning of a good night.

[Kiari Sabon]

i like it and idk if its jus me but i can feel ur emotions ebbing from it

[George Korolog]

The writing is nicely done, but personally, I think that this would read and have a better feel as a tercet. I know that you understand form, so it's simply a suggestion and would require a little rewrite.

Let's tango,
until all your doubts disappear,
until you dissolve in the rush of the chase.

[fireblossom]

Nice. urgency so severe it hurts mmmmm

there is something about you
a direct delicacy

Hot silk

Ancient and vital as a new dawn


Great writing.

[Raymond]

there's an entire story here isnt' there? Flashback, the remaining three, I think that I would? There should be. Bestseller Julie, bestseller