A Wish

A Wish

A Poem by Devanshu Rajput
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hope you would enjoy my best piece written so far.......

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My useless body, looks outside the window.


Sees the pleasant nature, 


comes a wish to run across the velvet grass.


The lovely rain makes me jealous,


 of children splashing in the puddles.


Once I want to wander,


 explore the fragrant flowers and the nectar fetching


 butterflies, in my garden.


The silent four corners of my room,


 reflect my helplessness and ask, 


 can my cursed body ever go out of the window?


The one who hears my unheard pain is the bed on which


 my body lies,


 since the time immemorial.


 

 

© 2015 Devanshu Rajput


Author's Note

Devanshu Rajput
Thanks for reading.

Image credits goes to Google and http://www.flickr.com/photos/[email protected]/6830788957

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Dear Devanshu

It is with absolute joy I welcome you to this website.

I am simply another aspiring writer on here and I like reviewing the words of others.

Firstly, you are very young. The internet can be a dangerous place. Take your brother's advice and help, to use it well as you are doing here.

I looked at your profile and could easily roll back the years and see a commonality in interest in the writers you like. In fact I still admire them to this day.

I praise your passion for writing.

I can see already much talent from this beautifully composed piece which celebrates the beauty of the world and nature, whilst boxed in a bedroom , when you want to be out there and enjoy it.

Some of my writing is accessible to all and some is restricted to those who are over 18.

Such are the demands of maturity.

Please may I ask you one thing?

Please keep up your passion for writing and stay on this site, which I consider a secure environment so that we can all enjoy your well constructed words and see the world as you see it for the betterment of us all.

I have a notion at 14 that you can teach me more about life and perception than I could ever teach you at 53.

Be encouraged.

I loved this piece and its perfect simplicity.

Please do not worry about reading my writing. Some of it will be restricted.

I do not require your review, just that you keep a free spirit, an open mind and teach us all .

With my warm regards


James

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

thank for your response ! I would certainly consider your advice.I love people of guidance and boost.. read more



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Simplicity and beauty all in one! A fine piece of writing :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

thanks
A well written peice that relates well to the reader, well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

thankx for ur kindness
love the rythym and structure of this one, it has a nice flow, makes for a great read!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

thankx:)
Dear Devanshu

It is with absolute joy I welcome you to this website.

I am simply another aspiring writer on here and I like reviewing the words of others.

Firstly, you are very young. The internet can be a dangerous place. Take your brother's advice and help, to use it well as you are doing here.

I looked at your profile and could easily roll back the years and see a commonality in interest in the writers you like. In fact I still admire them to this day.

I praise your passion for writing.

I can see already much talent from this beautifully composed piece which celebrates the beauty of the world and nature, whilst boxed in a bedroom , when you want to be out there and enjoy it.

Some of my writing is accessible to all and some is restricted to those who are over 18.

Such are the demands of maturity.

Please may I ask you one thing?

Please keep up your passion for writing and stay on this site, which I consider a secure environment so that we can all enjoy your well constructed words and see the world as you see it for the betterment of us all.

I have a notion at 14 that you can teach me more about life and perception than I could ever teach you at 53.

Be encouraged.

I loved this piece and its perfect simplicity.

Please do not worry about reading my writing. Some of it will be restricted.

I do not require your review, just that you keep a free spirit, an open mind and teach us all .

With my warm regards


James

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

thank for your response ! I would certainly consider your advice.I love people of guidance and boost.. read more
This is indeed a fine poem from a very talented young poet ! ( Great use of language 1)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

thanks
oh my.... silly question... r u paralyzed or something? (sometimes i take things too literally)


Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

no i am not!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

if i were so i would not be able to sit here!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!111
N!LoC

9 Years Ago

lol
awesome

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

thanks
deep words of sadness
feeling trapped in a space that has you making so many decisions
thank you for sharing

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
A nice piece, though very sad. A great way of conveying how people with certain illnesses may feel, good work!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

thanks
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