Limerick-3

Limerick-3

A Poem by Devanshu Rajput
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An attempt to make you laugh!

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There once was a man who had no hair

He feared from heat he could not bear

with the sun on his head

He can bake eggs and bread,

Which he promised some day he would share.

 

© 2015 Devanshu Rajput


Author's Note

Devanshu Rajput
Please do help me to make it a real limerick. I appreciate your presence here. Thanks to alf and FT Ledrew, for granting more beauty to this piece,

Devanshu

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Dear Devanshu,

Well it did make me laugh! Well done Limerick. Content was good, rhyming was good......syllables a litte out but that's ok, you made a mighty effort here my friend! A very worthy contest submission, thank you so much for joining in!

For the edification of others who are not sure what the format is, here is the form requirements for limericks.

A limerick is a humorous poem consisting of five lines.

The first, second, and fifth lines must have seven to ten syllables
while rhyming and having the same verbal rhythm.

The third and fourth lines only have to have five to seven syllables,
and have to rhyme with each other and have the same rhythm.

It all sounds very complicated but once you get the hang of it, it's smooth sailling!

Here is a link you might like to take a peek at poets

http://www.poetry4kids.com/blog/lessons/how-to-write-a-limerick/



Posted 4 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Really nice.... I cannot be of much help technically but the piece is very nice.
Certainly made me laugh !! :))

Posted 3 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

3 Years Ago

Limerick is all about making people laugh. Thanks for reading.

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It certainly did make me smile and well done with the rhyming and the metering. ☺

Posted 4 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

4 Years Ago

Thanks for the review.

Devanshu
Good one Devanshu... humour is the most difficult thing to write... I have tried it many times and failed most of the times... but this is one very well written.. good one...:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

4 Years Ago

Thanks for the compliment. Ya, it is hard but only until you practice and get a hang of it, then it .. read more
I found that hilarious. very good job. Helena did a good job commenting on some of the technical aspects.

Posted 4 Years Ago


haha cool!!! that's great! i like it!

Posted 4 Years Ago


i love it, it is funny and has some strong images

Posted 4 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

4 Years Ago

I'm glad you liked it.

Devanshu
Funny piece Devanshu, i would think thrice before eating his eggs and bread though:-)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

4 Years Ago

So would I. Lol

Thanks for stopping by.

Devanshu
Passengerr

4 Years Ago

You're welcome Devanshu.
This is an old tale retold in a very lyrical way. We are also waiting for egg and baked that way to be shared with us. Kudos.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

4 Years Ago

I will advice not to have them. They can be mixed with his sweat and what not. lol

I .. read more
Hahaha. I like this one a lot! It's a funny and nice poem! :D

Posted 4 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

4 Years Ago

I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for reading.

Devanshu
Remarkably good penning done. Keep it up


Posted 4 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

4 Years Ago

Thanks for reading.

Devanshu

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