Limerick-3

An attempt to make you laugh!

There once was a man who had no hair

He feared from heat he could not bear

with the sun on his head

He can bake eggs and bread,

Which he promised some day he would share.

 

Author's Note

Please do help me to make it a real limerick. I appreciate your presence here. Thanks to alf and FT Ledrew, for granting more beauty to this piece,

Devanshu

Reviews

[Helena]

Dear Devanshu,

Well it did make me laugh! Well done Limerick. Content was good, rhyming was good......syllables a litte out but that's ok, you made a mighty effort here my friend! A very worthy contest submission, thank you so much for joining in!

For the edification of others who are not sure what the format is, here is the form requirements for limericks.

A limerick is a humorous poem consisting of five lines.

The first, second, and fifth lines must have seven to ten syllables
while rhyming and having the same verbal rhythm.

The third and fourth lines only have to have five to seven syllables,
and have to rhyme with each other and have the same rhythm.

It all sounds very complicated but once you get the hang of it, it's smooth sailling!

Here is a link you might like to take a peek at poets

http://www.poetry4kids.com/blog/lessons/how-to-write-a-limerick/

[Mayank]

HAHAHA! Perfecto. Reminded me of Shel Silverstein.

[Devanshu Rajput]

Who can forget Uncle Shelby? Thanks for reading.

Devanshu

[Mayank]

Yes, I was feeling down few weeks back and I kept on reading his books. I felt better, keep it up. Looks like, I am gonna find another favorite writer here.

[Rajagopala Rao Srinadhu..]

It was funny alright..!
liked the rhymes..i actually sang it and it sounded really good
the syllables maybe werent all matched up but it flowed along nicely
good work:)


ps: sorry for the late review, was occupied with work

[Devanshu Rajput]

Sorry that syllable count was not perfect. Glad you liked it.

Devanshu

[Rajagopala Rao Srinadhuni]

Don't be it's a good one...and for the syllables try singing it out..that sort of helps me sometimes :)

[Rajat malik]

Funny!!!! A childish poem I loved it....

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for it.

Devanshu

[prajakta]

this was good:-)funny:-).

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for it.

Devanshu

[Saddam]

Wonderful creation bro.
that was fuuny..

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for it.

Devanshu

[Confuser]

Devanshu: I enjoyed it....I did laugh and you present a great visual. Don't know if I'd want to eat the eggs or bread. Thought about cave men and lack of fire: Think they had too much hair. Don't even know the style or format for a limerick. Great work and please keep writing. Thank you...Dale

[Devanshu Rajput]

Please do see the review of Mrs. Helena. You will know much about Limerick.

You also made me laugh. Thanks for reading.

Devanshu

[RiverRei]

This is definitely interesting. I've never written a limerick (not sure how to/what the format is), but I enjoy the picture that was created with what you have here. Nice work, thank you for sharing :)

[Devanshu Rajput]

Please have a look of Mrs. Helena's review. You will get to know about Limericks.

Thanks for stopping by. Glad you liked it.

Devanshu

[Ruth]

Ah, bless...I love the last visual :)

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for it.

Devanshu

[W R Stowe]

Nice you gave me a chuckle sad but birds of prey will think a bald head is a stone and may drop a turtle on it in attempts to crack it open

[Devanshu Rajput]

hahaha. You also gave me a chuckle(A big one, I might add)

Thanks for reading.

Devanshu

[W R Stowe]

your quite welcome