Desolation

Desolation

A Poem by Devanshu Rajput
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Life of a desolate. Let me make this clear:- The poem does not convey my feelings. It is just about someone who is a victim of depression, that's all!

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I am sad and also sometimes glad,

Over the life to me bestowed.

Thinking about it makes me mad,

I should be striding on which road?

*

This life is brief and I am in grief,

I now hope for a ray of light.

Here, my life is like a fallen leaf

I wander like a string-less kite.

*

Even the satanic sky asks why,

 This cold world here is cruel to me,

 Rather than to live, I long to die,

Perhaps that way I can be free.

© 2015 Devanshu Rajput


Author's Note

Devanshu Rajput
The poem adheres a strict syllable count of :- 9,8,9,8. And, rhyme scheme is also very strict. It is one of the toughest poem by me.

The poem is not about me, it is what I got in my mind, and then I let it flow in words. I am very positive by the way.

As always, the doors for critics are always welcome. Be harsh and strict while reviewing. I want to make this good.

I thank Sir Tate and Perkele.7885, for there kindness.

Thanks for stopping by and sparing time upon my work. Reading it is as same as honoring my efforts.

I firstly had named it "Introvert" but changed it and put "Pessimist". but soon after I again changed it to "Desolation" as many reviewers told me that, introversion and pessimism are different from depression. Thanks to those reviewers.

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Devanshu

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I wander like a stringless kite.
This can happen on more occasions than one.
As soon as I read this line, I thought that as a dreamer I can relate to it.
Just a thought.

Your poem is amazing. The rhyme scheme was good too.
The ideas were expressed brilliantly.
You are very cheerful and that's why its a pleasant surprise how you carved out a poem from the view point of a loner with such perfection!
Kudos!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devanshu Rajput

7 Years Ago

Thanks for the beautiful review. I'm glad you liked it.

Devanshu
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This one quite does justice to the feeling of being lost but yes I still can see some hope or at least a wish for it in between the words.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

6 Years Ago

I am glad, I was able to deliver the message to you.

Thanks for stopping by. I am hu.. read more
The poem comprehends the human nature to seek short cuts and then flows in the direction of desolation. "I wander like a string-less kite." The line is so on point.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

6 Years Ago

Hi there! Your reviews are always wonderful. I'm glad you are back, after a long battle. lol
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Shivam Murari

6 Years Ago

Yea, the battles over! You're welcome. :)
Good strict use of discipline but it also depicts the feeling behind such restriction while not allowing emotion to rule.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

6 Years Ago

Thanks for reading and reviewing the poem. Your reviews are always appreciated.

Devan.. read more
this is your best so far I think

Posted 7 Years Ago


Tate Morgan

7 Years Ago

you have done well and i noticed happy birthday young man well done!
Devanshu Rajput

7 Years Ago

Thanks for privileging me with your wishes. One selfish request:- Wish that one day I will become a .. read more
Tate Morgan

7 Years Ago

weall wish that As you know it isnt talent as much as it is practiice
This is definitely an interesting write. I like the format you used. I could feel everything the character was feeling as I read and that's always interesting to be able to connect with the piece. I've even felt this way before: glad, sad, mad...almost all at the same time. It can be very confusing. Very well written, thank you for sharing this with me :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

7 Years Ago

I am glad, I was able to execute my job perfectly. Thanks for the encouraging review. I appreciate i.. read more
Thoughts are deep here...
Depression ...it is a deep subject
So different for so many
This is a good write fine sir
Thank you for sharing

Posted 7 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

7 Years Ago

I really am very glad you are back.

Don't call me sir. Call me Dev.

T.. read more
I like the whole poem, it has a deep meaning and wonderfully written. Well done! ;)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

7 Years Ago

Thanks for stopping by and leaving such a a beautiful review.

Devanshu
KUDOS... great job with the rhyme scheme...

Posted 7 Years Ago


Reminds me of my poem 'Love me as it is!' ... so I love it as it is. Touching, nice message and great rhythm.

Posted 7 Years Ago


good one Devanshu... but i feel that few moments of listening can save someone from it... can cite my personal experience where i went through hell.... only coz of my family that I could come back.... its about that constant support that one needs... but good poem indeed....

Posted 7 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

7 Years Ago

Thanks for reading. Life is all about good and bad times.

Devanshu

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