Shame

Shame

A Poem by dianalondon

A sideways glace towards the floor,

A tilt of the head,

Eyes full of scorn,

Self-contempt.

A bite of the lip,

An excruciatingly slow deep breath,

A twist of the ring,

Regret.

Exhilarating rouge of the cheeks,

A pull at a lock of hair,

A twitch of the brow,

Distress.

 

Free yourself from your web of lies.

You don’t want to live your life in constant denies.

 

© 2013 dianalondon


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Free yourself from your web of lies.
You don’t want to live your life in constant denies.

Above one these lines' conveyed a great msg to us.. well written poem. I liked this poem. I was making some characters of your this poem where i am touching her hair and she's twisting her lips and looking at me and feeling so Exotic... HAHAH :)

Nice write.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

dianalondon

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much! I am so happy you liked this poem!



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Great use of imagery to show how shame makes us feel...
I love the last two lines....so gripping and so true. Well done!

Posted 6 Years Ago


dianalondon

6 Years Ago

Thank you Lisa! I am happy you liked this!
You did a amazing job making the word "Shame" have reason and purpose. The strong description brought to life the emotions and fear of the truth. No weakness in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

dianalondon

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much Coyote for the great review! I am looking forward to reading your poetry as well :.. read more
Now... this one has life... the lines flow and the message gets across the reader... I would fix the last line... seems your telling them in steady of giving them a choice in the ending:

You don’t want to live your life in constant denies.
Don’t try to live your life in constant denial.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

dianalondon

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your review, I appreciate your comments. :)
Glen Yumang Manese

5 Years Ago

you're welcome...
Free yourself from your web of lies.
You don’t want to live your life in constant denies.

Above one these lines' conveyed a great msg to us.. well written poem. I liked this poem. I was making some characters of your this poem where i am touching her hair and she's twisting her lips and looking at me and feeling so Exotic... HAHAH :)

Nice write.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

dianalondon

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much! I am so happy you liked this poem!
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A distinct but interesting imagery of shame you created in this one. I like this pretty modern (and even kind of experimental) way of writing and the use of words.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

dianalondon

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much for this review, yes I was trying out a new, in a way unconventional format in t.. read more
You did a wonderful job showing Shame. I enjoyed the imagery you created to highlight that shame. My only suggestion.. "denies" seems out of place at the end.. "denial" sounds better and flows better. Great work here, dianalondon.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

dianalondon

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your suggestion! I am glad you enjoyed it as well :)

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