IMMORTALS KISS

I wrote this one a long time ago, and I lost it... today I found it..

Come hither within,
Your life’s lonely end,
A touch of  forevers youth.

Dreams of nights of sinfully
Plights and days of peacefully slumber.

Hold my hand as we explore this land.
forevers-promised gifts.

 

One touch from my lips to your sweet skin,

will accept my Immortal Kiss.

Author's Note

This is one of my first vampire poems, I lost it and couldn't find it for several years, and Today I found where I hide it.

Reviews

[BrightEyes]

hon, i'm so sorry. I dont know what happened. I'm reviewing this again, in the hopes it will let me rate again. I slid the bar over - it said 100 and I hit rate. After it loaded, it said 89%. I'm going to try to rate again to fix it. I'm so so so sorry!

ok - here's what I did - I deleted the review with the other rating - which I hope deletes the rating. Anyway - liked this one! loved the phrase "forevers promised gifts". and how that led into the ending of "immortal kiss". ok - trying this again.

*hugs*

laura

[James K. Blaylock]

So sexy.

[Yaooooooo]

Nice, i just felt like it was a bit short. Right when you getting into it, it ends. Overall the concept and the poem is well put together...
I also like the picture you put up with it, it reminded me of an Interview with the Vampires...
Thanks for the request and thanks for a good read...
Keep them coming, feel free to send me a request any time you want..
One!

[H. A. M.]

I can only picture Tom Cruise bitting Brad Pitt from that Ann Rice vampire movie. That doesn't mean i'm gay does it?
I keed.
It's real seductive. Something a vampire might say to a victim.
Very nice and sensual.

[PhoeniX]

ooo so ravishing.

[Ivory]

Very sensual and beautifully written. very good piece : )

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I love it .. lost many vampire poems i had too .. this title is perfect..
Good one, Diana.

Chloe
xoxo

Glad you found it .

[James Mayfield]

Except for the run of s's on the 4th and 5th lines I think its a great piece. Well done.

[Kim Kruger]

Glad you found it Diana. A good one and it's nice to be able to see how your writing in this genre has developed and matured, and it has.

[MSY]

Cool poem man. Really liked it.

XoXo
RS

[Dezaraye]

I like this. It has a briefness to it that's really intriguing and creates a great mental image.