I am alone

I am alone

A Story by Dianne

 

I am alone. I had been the youngest of four. Mother got divorced before I was two. In an instant my sisters and brother are gone. My best friends and my rivals are all gone. Her husband stole them away. He doesn’t want me. I live in a strange neighborhood, in a different house.
 
Mother works nights. I dress by my self now. No one tells me to be quiet. There is no need to. There is nothing to do here. On the refrigerator I find instructions for breakfast, a bowl of cereal and a glass of milk. I eat. I walk down the street to the baby sitter’s. Her girls are nice. I miss my brother.
 
When she wakes, Mother comes for me. She’s been crying. We go back. I am still alone. I learn that family and friends will never be there when I need them. I am always alone.

© 2008 Dianne


Author's Note

Dianne
Writing this memory of being two was triggered by reading Yinseriv's story With Love to my Librarian.
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/jimvires/221139/

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this story is so touching. i had to go through the same, but my mother was never married, and i had to raise my brother and sisters to an extent. so, i know this characters feelings. great work. so touching to the heart.

Posted 12 Years Ago


How did I miss this?
This story blew holes in my mismatched socks from the impact.
I read somewhere that the greatest writers are those who have suffered deeply.
You aren't alone anymore because your circle is only an email away, my friend.



Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ouch and on my... I really can feel your pain... terrible what divorce can do to a family, especially the child who doesn't understand what is happening.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very hauntingly sad story. So cleanly written, you have captured the child's emotion perfectly.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a great job! You capture the sadness and lonliness perfectly, and it seems so effortless (always nice when it SEEMS effortless). Your little narrator sums up the lonliness in such simple terms, missing siblings, that you can feel the lonliness along with the narrator. Loved it!
N~

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

As already noted, it's a nice piece of writing and holds enough interest for me to want to see what happens next. Is there anymore ?

~Raven

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You captured the sad feelings of loneliness and heartache.

Well done!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It is true that ultimately we are very alone in this world. Your story is so sad it breaks my heart.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice piece. The title didn't do it justice. I almost passed it by thinking it was another 'he she' left me and broke my heart. I am a love cynic but sibling love is the real thing, so is parental love.

Nice work, I appreciate the reality of this color on the pallet of your life.

JS

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Life can change on the turn of a moment. This is a sobering glimpse of how the actions of others change the perception of self. You give proof that a story doesn't need 450 pages to be complete. It just needs a lifetime.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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