belonging.

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there's so much i should have said,

said the voices in my head.

and life is just keepin on.

before i knew,

or thought it through,

i gave the wrong 

me to you...

these days i just think,

over and over;

rehashing this or that.

 -and i can't seem to decide

was it fate, how i failed,

was it fate to be so wrong

so i'll just put thingz 

where they belong.

i'll wander slowly,

searching my mind

for the peace, in me,

i've left behind....

and how the mirrors deceive us.

they let us think who we are.

and though our lovers believe us,

it only goes--

and, it only goes so far.

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Reviews

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

I'll simply point and say "that guy over there...is a damn good wordsmith. You paint a vivid picture with your words. I'm an old fart, don't like 'z' subbing for 's', but your writing is pure, and true to you. Great job!
"i gave the wrong me to you"...Brilliant!

[DiMar4u]

I wound up singing in a band out in Staten Island and turned this one into a song...add a little, take a little...my heart needed it I suppose.

[Suditi]

The last stanza, is so amazing.
The whole poem is beautiful actually.
But the last stanza is mind blowing.

[A.A.Romanczuk]

ah the mirrors break and cut us with their gaily shining slivers. ouch.

[Siddhartha]

and that sense of belonging...which never leaves us...that never lets go...And lurks in the shadows...beautiful write...

[sushi]

Beautiful.....

"before i knew,
or thought it through,
i gave the wrong
me to you..."


Its really wonderful.... :)

[Sherbs Dreaming Tree Of..]

Absolutely beautiful :)

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was simply perfect. I love this piece. It was very powerful. You're writing is pure like the writer below me said. Thanks for sharing. :)