Life, Not Quite A Haiku

A poem about the zen of life

Life occurs in the periods we do not notice,

Those we do not see.

The coffee cup is full, then empty.

How many sips in between?

Author's Note

Brief, I know--

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Maybe it's not what you do but the way in which you do it. There's a sip or two gone under my proverbial bridge and at each I''ve learned a lesson.

Clever thinking, Audrey, finely put.

[FJ Davis]

Very perceptive, Audrey. Keep noticing what most do not.
Great piece.

[LA Lorena]

Brief yes, but concise and eloquently stated. My only criticism would be the chosen font.....something that speaks this loudly deserves more space and impact upon the page. :)

[ice]

More like a not quite senyru..but it doesn't matter, what matters is the impact on a readers mind..Now I am thinking of the million sips of life between coffee sips..see.. your poem had the impact I was speaking of...
enjoyed

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[Aidz]

This is quite good well done

[Patches I'm not so new..]

Haikus aren't my cup O coffee but this one is cute

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Made me think, you did.......wow!

[Dream Weaver]

Not quite a haiku but quite good just the same.
Nicely done....