random rap #1

random rap #1

A Story by Mr.Cardigan
"

its random what is there to say

"

well here we go back to the same random show

this is number one coming at you like a shot gun

b*****s be snitchin there worst then the itches

from a bug bite ive been think of you all night

i drove a truck over a duck and we were like DAFUQ

im so bored like a mini van with 4 door

hardy har f**k you house bar you kicked me out because i went to far

if my raps offend go jump off the deep end

into the pool like a village fool

try to out run my gun  come lets have some fun

this would sound better if you could hear me doing this with my vocal skills so just take a chill pill

because i have a licence to ILL..........

© 2012 Mr.Cardigan


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Mr.Cardigan
If you review this ill love you all over your face...........ahhahahhahaha jk

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OMG YOUR AMAZING!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This remind me on Hollywood Undead, you have the same style, but they're more.. you know what i mean. xD
It's not so clear cause of that grammatic errors, and you should slide down some rhymes and do them half, of course, you don't have to listen to me.
All in all, your poem is awesome (:
Thanks for sharing..Keep it up :D

Posted 8 Years Ago


I like this, though I believe you could have slowed down with changing your rhymes, if you know what I mean. Oh, and fixing some of the grammar mistakes would be good, but it's not a big problem.
Keep it up!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Mr.Cardigan

8 Years Ago

Thanks man i agree 100%
Awesome. :D

Posted 8 Years Ago


Mr.Cardigan

8 Years Ago

thanks
You have a license to ill? *jealous* lol nice rap :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Mr.Cardigan

8 Years Ago

yes
Lina Grey

8 Years Ago

You know if it sounds better out loud you could probably record yourself saying it and put the recor.. read more
Mr.Cardigan

8 Years Ago

i should
Ahahah :) awesome rap!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Mr.Cardigan

8 Years Ago

thanks
♪The Girl Next Door♪

8 Years Ago

No problem

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