Forbidden Fruit

Need blossoms inside me, like a flower in full bloom.
Normalcy renders me useless, to the snake, impending doom.
I want what I cannot have the most.
Visions of false truths dance inside my empty head.
Desire overtakes me, makes me wish that I were dead.
I couldn’t have dreamed of sugarplums.
Forbidden fruit beckons me and no lesson has been learned.
Easily obtainable, it’s what I feel I’ve earned.
Obviously Eve has taught me nothing.
Plucked from a high branch, it’s sweet juice drips down my face.
Bellows through the garden, I’m no longer in God’s grace.
That’s what lust will get you in this life.
 
                  Just a half eaten apple, evil to the core.

Reviews

[AJ Kristiansen]

Mmmm wow! Loved this! Very interesting take on what it is to be human and our perception of punishment. We struggle with our own natures, our own desires and question what is right and wrong... Beautiful images DoubleReality, could almost taste the sweet fruit dribbling down my chin! :)

[Melinda Weber]

Bravo! Interesting piece, held my attention and you had a nice flow with your words :) Love the ending, good write :)

[Richard Layne]

i love the line "i couldn't have dreamed of sugarplums." you've written a very evocative piece here.

[tk]

the beginning of sin... :) temptations are really hard to resist. you've shown that masterfully. it is also crafted very deeply. great write!! ^_^
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[rosemary keogh]

Love it really creative and very nice flow. Brill :)

[R J Askew]

Success not sex is my forbidden fruit. I crave it, yet the getting of it is desctuctive of the innocent self. The urge for forbidden sex usually ends in a swift crash and a swift rebalancing. The lust for success goes on and on and on. It is not a low hanging sugar plum but what does it do to us? Eve's tempations are nothing compared to the urge to win, to succeed. Your poem made me think deep.

[WhiteWillow]

You capture the flaws of human nature perfectly. A wonderful write.

[Hachamecha]

Forbidden things makes one crave it more...
excellent:)

[The Winter Grey]

Absolutely indelible. The emotion here is palpable, thick and suffocating. The imagery is fantastic, and your use of metaphor is spot-on. I really enjoyed the brief snippets of inner-thought inserted into the poem, that was a great touch. Terrific work.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Temptation to that we may desire even when we know its not good for one or us sometimes becomes a tough challenge we must over come, love how you brought this piece together. Excellent write.