Hidden Feelings

With all the things I feel inside

I find it hard to run and hide

This pain I feel is so unreal

It takes me spinning, like a wheel

It doesn’t stop, it just keeps going

Like a never ending story

I’m struggling to do this right

And it seems to be putting up one hell of a fight

No matter what I won’t surrender

Even if it makes me suffer

With all these things I feel inside

I find it hard to run and hide

The voice I hear only gets louder

Shouting at me “you’re a loner”

The silent screams I can’t release 

Seem to haunt me in my dreams

 

It doesn’t stop, it just keeps going

Like a never ending story

I find myself on a journey

Trying to solve this disturbing mystery 

I’m struggling to do this right

But I can’t seems to find the light

With every step that I take

Only seems to bring me heartache 

The pain I  feel is so unreal

I’m unable to handle this ordeal 

I’m quietly falling apart

Leaving me with a broken heart

Reviews

[Helpless]

I’m struggling to do this right
But I can’t seems to find the light
With every step that I take
Only seems to bring me heartache

this stanza touched me to the chor! so much like how i'm feeling right now! raw emotion is always the most elegant to me! and this is fantastic! i loved it!

[Sabrina Demartini]

nicely done

[Decaf]

well put

[Shellie]

I love this!
It's amazing how a poem can make you feel so many things at the same time even when you write or read ,And this poem really is strong with emotion
beautiful.

[Dustin Reichmuth]

Wow! This is just, pure, and raw emotion. It's absolutely wonderful. It really touched me.

"I'm struggling to do this right
But I can't seem to find the light
With every step that I take
Only seems to bring me heartache

I really relate to that stanza, and it's great to see it portrayed in such a way. Great job!