Chapter 16

last chapter.

Chapter 16: The End

A ghost. A ghost of someone I loved. A ghost of someone who I’ll always love. A ghost who follows my every move. A ghost who knows me well. A ghost who knows my secrets. Sometimes when I write about her living life, I feel her ghostly presence. The lights around me will sometimes flicker when I write and think about her. The letters on my wall about her move around a bit, when there is no wind or no fan going. Her pictures on my wall move around. Sometimes after I write about her, I lay down in bed, gripping my pillow, thinking it’s her. Sometimes when I do this, and my other hand is free, I feel a weight on my hand like if she was holding it. Just then, I whisper, “I love you”. Then the presence goes, and then I’m alone.

Reviews

[Sunflower 20]

i knew the man in this story was you! i could tell by the way you write about him, its as if you knew him, and you do, because its you!!! great job, such an awesome story, thank you for sharing :)

[Reaper]

nice ending. good story.

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

Although this is short, it's easily my favorite chapter. I felt engaged with the man, like I can feel that weight on his hand, too. His emotion is radiating. Nice ending!

[Muse]

How freaky and lovely at the same time. I love how you keep your ideas and sentences short and simple. It makes for an easier read. You chose your words so well I could imagine this experience as if it were my own.

[Bailey C. Writing]

This has an almost poetic feel to it even though it's a chapter to a story. I'd love more imagery, but I can still feel the emotion the man is feeling...the element of a good chapter is still here

[Bellamorte]

You need to write more. I'm intrigued as to what the man does next.

This is good. Make it more powerful! Expand it a bit. Don't just tell me about the ghost, put me in the room with you.

[Shantel Moore]

your really good. :)
except your book made me so sad :(
but i still love it.

[Balls:)]

derek.
this was so frikin great.
so, totally, great.


Rating: Fantastical

[∂αʌ<..]

you captured the sadness so well!
well-written!