Chapter 16

Chapter 16

A Chapter by The old me

last chapter.


Chapter 16: The End

A ghost. A ghost of someone I loved. A ghost of someone who I’ll always love. A ghost who follows my every move. A ghost who knows me well. A ghost who knows my secrets. Sometimes when I write about her living life, I feel her ghostly presence. The lights around me will sometimes flicker when I write and think about her. The letters on my wall about her move around a bit, when there is no wind or no fan going. Her pictures on my wall move around. Sometimes after I write about her, I lay down in bed, gripping my pillow, thinking it’s her. Sometimes when I do this, and my other hand is free, I feel a weight on my hand like if she was holding it. Just then, I whisper, “I love you”. Then the presence goes, and then I’m alone.

© 2011 The old me

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i knew the man in this story was you! i could tell by the way you write about him, its as if you knew him, and you do, because its you!!! great job, such an awesome story, thank you for sharing :)

Posted 9 Years Ago

nice ending. good story.

Posted 9 Years Ago

Although this is short, it's easily my favorite chapter. I felt engaged with the man, like I can feel that weight on his hand, too. His emotion is radiating. Nice ending!

Posted 10 Years Ago

How freaky and lovely at the same time. I love how you keep your ideas and sentences short and simple. It makes for an easier read. You chose your words so well I could imagine this experience as if it were my own.

Posted 10 Years Ago

This has an almost poetic feel to it even though it's a chapter to a story. I'd love more imagery, but I can still feel the emotion the man is feeling...the element of a good chapter is still here

Posted 10 Years Ago

You need to write more. I'm intrigued as to what the man does next.

Posted 10 Years Ago

This is good. Make it more powerful! Expand it a bit. Don't just tell me about the ghost, put me in the room with you.

Posted 10 Years Ago

your really good. :)
except your book made me so sad :(
but i still love it.

Posted 10 Years Ago

this was so frikin great.
so, totally, great.

Rating: Fantastical

Posted 10 Years Ago

you captured the sadness so well!

Posted 10 Years Ago

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