Love Lost

I felt kinda lost when I wrote this,so...:)

I don't understand,

Help me,I'm lost in this land;

Help me,I'm hurt.

I don't know where to go,

The winds of hate and hurt will always blow.

 

I'm looking for you,

I'm lost,I don't know what to do,

Oh please; please find me,

I'm cut,see,I'm bleeding.

My strength for life is leaving.

 

Look,I'm here,I'm all alone,

You're all I've ever known.

Please. Please come and fnd me;

My strength for life soon will flee.

 

You're my last hope,my omly chance,

I've been pierced by his lance,

I can feel you,you're coming closer,

I'm dying,barely alive

Only with you can I survive.

 

I trusted him,he betrayed me,

I'm weak, no longer free.

Deceit and lies are his way;

took advantage of me a stray.

 

The wind is stronger,

My strength I have no longer,

I see him in the horizon,

I reach out,starting to fall,

He shouts,giving hope by his call.

 

The wind has stopped; so's my heart,

from this pain I now must depart,

I love you and you love me.

And he from life with me did flee.

 

Together forever we are the breeze,

the breeze of gentle love upon the seas,

we fight the wind of hurt and hate,

day by day we win some more,

and soon all love will freely soar.

 

 

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[November Gold]

Penned beautifully and so real and so raw, the hurt was loud, the begging to be saved. Betrayal is so hard to take, but I have found one really good thing in the pain...we write ;) And when we write, we heal. Thanks for this one, I needed it.

[castargirl]

*clap* *clap* *clap* this was really good! I always love your poems because they have such a depth and meaning about them. This seems like a very personal poem, like this is actually going on in your life and you needed a way to speak the truth to people.

[DontBlink158]

This was a great poem. The start was really full of lost and full of pain. You did a great job of sliding into the point of happiness, i know some people just quick snap into it, but you very nicely slid into it. Great job!!

[frozensakura]

great poem. i really enjoyed reading this(:

[Piper Lynn]

Wonderful. I like the sadness and how everything doesn't come together to a happy ending. Very nice poem.

[Just Me]

There are no words in my vocabulary to describe this poem. That's how good it is! Wonderful!!!!

[CraziiDeerz]

This is so well written that I can't even think of words to describe it...GOOD JOB!!!!

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing ride in your poem. The poem is sad but I like the flow and how you make your point.
"Please. Please come and fnd me;
My strength for life soon will flee."
I like the ending to this excellent poem. When love escape us. Ain't easy to soar freely with the wind.
Coyote

[pedro]

Boo hoo hoo :-) I almost cried but it is really good I like it

So beautifully written, so true and raw and as though you've torn a page out of my journal :) My favourite line is 'We fight the wind of hurt and hate'. Love it. Beautiful Beautiful Beautiful!