Ringing Ringing in the Silence

Written during a bout of existential depression Excerpt: A dove I was born, but you have made me an unsightly crow. I try to sing euphonious tunes, but I am not a nightingale nor am I a nimble parrot

A dove

I was born, but you have made me an unsightly crow.

I try to sing euphonious tunes, but I am not a nightingale

nor am I a nimble parrot.

 

Death has marked me,

scraped my skin with its sordid nails. Black,

I have become a shadow within shadows of shadows.

 

Am I charming? Amusing? Do I

make you cachinnate up there,

or here, or are you there?

“Live. You must live,” say those who have

delved too deeply into frivolous pursuits

and have forgotten, as the incurious

are wont to do, that they are merely

finite little creatures who roam about

in a finite little world

in a vast ever-expanding space,

a lonely universe.

 

A cavernous hollow hole.

 

And us, the pretty blue bell

ringing ringing in the silence. 

Reviews

[zainul]

It is a wonderful piece.
Its rhymes and words make me listen euphonious tunes.
Depression didn't disappoint you.
A lovely poem has been created.
Each word of it has the potential of an epic.
I am lost in the magic of your thoughts:
"A dove
I was born, but you have made me an unsightly crow.
I try to sing euphonious tunes, but I am not a nightingale
nor am I a nimble parrot."
and
"And us, the pretty blue bell
ringing ringing in the silence."

[Aisha Mnd]

Thank you zainul for your review! Your feedback brought a smile to my face. :)

[zainul]

You are a genius.You deserve a smile.
Please smile,young poet.:)

[Aisha Mnd]

Haha. Thank you!

[zainul]

You are most always welcome,sweet friend.:)

[KeeD]

Love the word choice you've played with to get the message of each line across. Talented writing for sure.
Often being in a lost state of mind, sitting in my room just feeling so detached from the world outside.... I go into an imaginative trance and this poem describes such a session. I could relate to this piece, liked it a lot. Not sure what series of events inspired such a write but you've come through with a winning piece, kudos!

[Aisha Mnd]

Thank you for your wonderful review! I'm happy to hear you could relate to this piece. I too delve into those trances from time to time – well, to be frank, I'm usually in them, aha. Again, thank you, and I'm anything but talented. I find my writing rather factitious.