Fleeting Moments

Fleeting Moments

A Poem by E.Potter

I see my children,
The sun in their hair, the wind in their clothes,
The sky in their eyes.
Freedom is theirs,
Fleeting, but true.

Emotions so pure,
Joy, rage, curiosity,
There and then gone,
A flash in time.

Innocence on the brink of knowledge,
My oldest always questioning,
Trying to understand the world around him.
All the while his brother struggles,
Just to keep up.

They grow so quickly,
New words, spelling, remembered trivia, writing.
But none of that matters, watching them spin,
Arms flung open,
Spirits like the wind.

© 2014 E.Potter


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Like how you write about your love for your children. You idealize them and it works. I'd like to see some of the darkness and fear that underpins this: your fears of them getting older, losing them, becoming distant, etc. Perhaps that is the theme of another poem...


Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I agree with the wonderful words.
"They grow so quickly,
New words, spelling, remembered trivia, writing.
But none of that matters, watching them spin,
Arms flung open,
Spirits like the wind."
Life does move very quickly. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago


awesome
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Posted 5 Years Ago


Such a true poem :) I love everything about it :) including your name! Awesome

Posted 5 Years Ago


Even though this is specific to your children, it opens up thoughts of the brief nature of life. Well penned! :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ah... Yes. The igniting mind of young spirits, innocence and wonderment, a treasure to hold in your heart forever. This is the magic that allows a mother to love her children, even when they are grown, and their path carries them into the shadows.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Through the eyes of a mother you poem takes us away. It leaves us in that mother's mind, seeing and thinking as she does. It is beautiful and true. You are a talented weaver of words.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

simple and well written ... will make any loving parent nostalgic

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Like how you write about your love for your children. You idealize them and it works. I'd like to see some of the darkness and fear that underpins this: your fears of them getting older, losing them, becoming distant, etc. Perhaps that is the theme of another poem...


Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the feeling of timelessness and the use of nature and innocence

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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