keeping time

notching a log on the way out of the wood

you saw your shadow creeping

scored the sky with a wince in your eye

some floating bit of meaning

It mattered this time

getting longer in the tooth

measured your words against the feeling of truth

I could tear a hole in the ozone so the Martians could get in

might even get to be one

and you won't hear me sound startled 

when I find myself in the silence

Getting the house ready for you

chomping at the bit

just trying to mean what I say

A calendar for god with a date circled in red

a lifelong montage of bloody teeth

and things I never said

But I'm still running my mouth before time runs out

And you're still climbing the mouth of some cave 

and I'm still scared I'll never see you

still not sure what it means to wait

Reviews

[likesgreeneggsandham]

I liked the continued image of teeth being used here 'longer in the tooth', 'chomping at the bit', 'bloody teeth'. It makes the poem's somewhat eerie tone all the more interesting. Fascinating.

[dukovan]

Thank you for reading!

[emmajoy]

Sometimes needs, dreams and longing itself, moves in erratic directions? That's how i read your gently paced poem, though sense an urgency, a 'will i get there in time.. i will, of course but just a minute'. You've stirred my thoughts now, will need return and read again...

' meantime, found this fascinating reading: '.. A calendar for god with a date circled in red - a lifelong montage of bloody teeth - and things I never said - But I'm still running my mouth before time runs out - and you're still climbing the mouth of some cave .. '

[dukovan]

Im very keen on the idea that its not up to the writer to decide much of what something means. That something always changes for me or focuses itself in more ways. But rereading your comment reminds me of just that. Its fun revisiting older work

[emmajoy]

The writer is human and, of course, in possession of his own thoughts.. til someone else shares them. Perhaps?!

[A.G.]

this poem is really beautiful. its meaning and words written nicely. great write (:
-Angelina

[April Blue]

i love it! Great use of words here and I can feel the emotion in this piece.. Nicely done!