Paladin's Bane

Please enjoy this poem. It was a good vent for me with a recent breakup. I hope you enjoy!

You called me your knight and so I am

But now I know your love was a sham

I fell for you in all your beauty

But in exchange I have felt your cruelty

I loved you with a love that surpassed all others

Verily it was different from that of your father or mother's

Unlike those who love you with condition

I wanted your heart, twas my only petition

Oh my lady I told you what I required

Long ago before all was mired

You seemed then willing to fulfill my decree

All I wanted was your heart to be free

To join me in a life long bliss

And when our wedding bells ring to share a sweet kiss

For you dear lady I wanted the best in life

For me nothing could be finer than to have you to wife

All who gazed upon us had the same thought

They all stood in awe saying look what God wrought

For in perfect union stood heaven's delight

Beautiful lady and chivalrous knight

Hand in hand now were we bold 

Professing our love wanting all to be told

Not many days thence an evil developed

And its twisted words your mind enveloped

Rapidly it took control of your vision

Thusly completing its unholy mission

For in your eyes I was knight no more

Now you see a demon drawing you to hell's door

I could hear in my soul the true demon's victory roar

As the cruel blade you lunged in my breast 

I looked as crimson ran down my chest

Your hand extended still holding the dagger

I felt weak and started to stagger

The last site of my eyes going dim

Was the fell spirit saying in your ear, forget him

This man was not what he appeared to be

But fear not fair lady, now you are free

Oh my lady what have you done

At the devil's beckon you've made my blood to run

Spilling out on forest floor

I know I dwell at death's door

Normally armor clad invulnerable to harm

Yet pierced by a woman under the demon's charm

Now blind from pain and lack of blood

I collapse in puddles of crimson mud

Crying out with my very last breath

I love you I love you til death!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[ChocolateMoose]

Wow! Very powerful! I really loved this poem. I know it's hard, but this just means God has someone better for you. It takes time, but I've learned this. God desires you to be happy, and He would not have placed the desire in your heart for a companion if He were not going to fill it. Remember Jeremiah 29:11! God has good plans for you, plans to prosper you and not to harm you, plans to give you HOPE and A FUTURE :)

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[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Well done and wait for your soul mate. It will be worth the wait.

[Kira]

O.
My.
God.

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Wow, the impact was incredible! So well put together!! LOVED IT!!!

[KhelticRyder]

"For you dear lady I wanted the best in life

For me nothing could be finer than to have you to wife" Such passion & desire. Very well put together.

[heroin.]

alas, love is a cruel mistress & her malice is vastly vindictive. this is an astute piece of heart. it's nothing more than the hand of evil that clenches away the very heart's beat in the correlation of two souls, leaving behind but mere remnants of shattered dreams & futures. well poured out, and i wish you the soonest of healing for from your previous apprehension. excellent work of art.

[Katie Foutz Voss]

I understand this far too well, and therefore enjoyed it thoroughly.
The voice in this poem definitely has a 'venting' feel to it, almost breathless and frantic, desperate to explain yourself and have an explanation--which is, in my opinion, absolutely perfect for the context.
The rhyming was original, and I appreciate that. I'm not entirely in love with rhymed poetry, but when I see it done well I delight in it.
I also loved that this was a story, much like an epic poem but without the 'epic' part. I love a poem that is a journey that readers can follow from start to end.
Thank you for this. :)

[Hannah]

jeepers this is a very good poem Colty.. I like it a lot but its very heart wrenching...

[Shadow Writer]

Great rhyme and flow. Well done. Phantom.............

[Queen Jummarrium]

wow. that was amazing. it really put the image in my head. that must have been some brake up, to write such a sad, painful poem. overall though i really liked it. great write