The New Girl

New girl is different from the others on her first day, but she walks on, not taking notice.

She wandered the halls, backpack in hand,

marching to the beat of her own marching band. 

Her hair tied back and ready to face

the hustle and bustle of the new human race. 

Unfamiliar faces filled the halls

They filled every corner and tooks up the walls.

They twisted and turned their locker combinations

while she fumbled with hers with lots of frustration. 

She grunted as she lifted her heavy text books

earning her from near by students some looks.

But the new girl marched on, books in hand,

marching to the beat of her own marching band. 

 

Author's Note

Very random!! I just felt like rhyming! :)

Reviews

[emipoemi]

Not bad! "tooks" doesn't need an "s", and "near by" needs to be one word. AND, it would be more powerful to in the last stanza say "backpack" instead of "books" to complete the echo to the first stanza. This is otherwise well done! Much enjoyed!

[Norma M Sutton]

I like this poem, especially this part
Her hair tied back and ready to face
the hustle and bustle of the new human race.

Unfamiliar faces filled the halls
They filled every corner and tooks up the walls.

[mess of gorgeous chaos]

this is really good emma!

[sara]

lovee it!!!!!!

[bonbon7810]

:D good job!

[Annie29]

great (:

[happy girl]

That's very good. I like it