In The Surface

view in the surface of the water

Swimming in the depth through the beach

Diving much deeper and deeper

See the coral and lovely sea creature to reach

feel the warmth of the sunlight that penetrates the water

 

Air bubbles that race to the surface

like million life’s breath run to the creator

The beauty of nature created for a purpose

Capture a moment that become more and more greater

 

for a moment I was stunned at the beauty inside

Go up to the surface, feel the heaviness of the pressure

Every breath that taken, every move back to the surface

Back into where I suppose to be

 

Ran towards the beach, drove by the waves.

staring at the beautiful sea surface

saved millions of mystery and the beauty kept inside

everything is hidden in the surface of life

Like a person that's seen on the outside

they have million thoughts and secret hidden inside

you can see the calmness and feel the sweetness

without realizing what could be a beast dwell in the depths

13th July 2014

@ Edward Lancheister

Reviews

[SleepSpectrum]

Wow! I really really loved this. Imagery was spot on and I could feel what you were writing. I loved: "feel the warmth of the sunlight that penetrates the water" I appreciate your analysis of the sea and all of it's wonder, because such a mysteriously beautiful place deserves much more attention through beautiful literature such as this. I love love loved it. I can't wait to read more from such a gifted writer!

[Edward Lancheister]

Thank you for encouraging review. Feel free to share this poem with all your friends

[Sweet Brevity]

'Everything is hidden in the surface of life' .. Wonderful lines throughout!

[Salem]

I give it a big wow just like the others, truly well done. and to be honest I was thinking this will be just a poem about nature but the way you turned it around in the last stanza was superb.

[Edward Lancheister]

thank you for review my poem, gladly you could capture the message behind these imagery words

[Salem]

you are welcome

[Konigin]

wow.
This is stunning!!!
Supurb job Edward!!!!! :D
I loved the imagry. I felt like I was right there, seeing it my self.
Beautiful pen friend.

[Edward Lancheister]

thank you Chelsea for read my poem, feel free to share with all your friends :)

[Konigin]

Your welcome.
I will! :)

[Edward Lancheister]

thank you for your kindness :)

[Beccy]

What lies beneath writ large and really well captured.

I really enjoyed this. Beccy.

[Edward Lancheister]

thank you Beccy for your review and stop by to read my poem

[Yours Truly]

I love how you ended it, and relate the sea and everything in it to someone and and everything inside of them.
A lovely piece. Enjoyed the read very much. :)
-Yours Truly

[Edward Lancheister]

thank you for your kindness review, it give me courage to write much more

[Chaselyn]

Very nice. If only people could see the entirety of others souls as easily as they can see natures beauty, nuances, and many mysterious facets.

[Edward Lancheister]

in everything always kept a mystery inside, until its reveal by time. thanks for review :)

[A. Amos]

I enjoyed the vivid world you created in this great write and last lines was a kiler! Nice to meet you my friend, I have traveled your magical country:)

[Edward Lancheister]

thank you, and welcome into "E.L Celestial" hopely you could enjoy my poems :)

[A. Amos]

Surely will do and you're most welcome...

[Elsie]

Man that was a wonderful poem too. It like you had hit what every human being does on the world. I feel like you capture the truth meaning behind every human.

[Edward Lancheister]

Indeed Elsie, we could not reveal the truth that hidden inside even closer

[Cassie Black]

This is magical! Imagery created is so beautiful

[Edward Lancheister]

Thank you Cathy for the review :)