Honey and milk bath

Honey and milk bath

A Poem by eglantine

... seaglass breath,

lullabyes and bubbles.

I write hallelujah on my skin,
where your lips used to murmur my name.

one by one, mermaids
fall from my eyes--
    they taste of salt.

I slip underwater to listen--
                         to check
that my heart still beats.

© 2013 eglantine


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amazing write...

"mermaids fall from my eyes"

really love that line.. checking that my heart still beats...

alone in a bath of bubbles, reminiscing...of a love that used to be...and a wondering by the speaker. "am i still alive?"

good stuff here.

jacob

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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hallelujah, oh how i need this

Posted 8 Years Ago


Wow this is amazing, good job

Posted 8 Years Ago


remind me not to let read requests build up so that i have to review half dozen of your poems at once. it's too much.

this is beautiful, amazing stuff.

Posted 8 Years Ago


amazing write...

"mermaids fall from my eyes"

really love that line.. checking that my heart still beats...

alone in a bath of bubbles, reminiscing...of a love that used to be...and a wondering by the speaker. "am i still alive?"

good stuff here.

jacob

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I missed this one before, but I'm glad I came back to give it a look. The second stanza is amazing, and I think its my favorite overall. Also, I liked the way you described tears without mentioning that's what they were. I've never though of a tear as a mermaid until I read you, but I think that is beautiful and fitting.

Posted 8 Years Ago


eglantine

8 Years Ago

glad that image worked! Wasn't sure at first
none of this is nonsense, it is pure, unadulterated metaphorical magnificence....well penned!

Posted 8 Years Ago


eglantine

8 Years Ago

Thank you Quin!
mermaid is such a fabled noun, with the upper body of a beautiful woman and the tail of a fish,
that when introduced poetically suggest a festive innocence. Using them as taste and tears is
an exciting metaphor...and masterfully done.

you write such tender poetry.
dana

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

eglantine

8 Years Ago

Thank you, mermaids are dear to me
I love it. Very tender and elegant.

Posted 8 Years Ago


eglantine

8 Years Ago

merci
beautiful. i love your imagery

Posted 8 Years Ago


eglantine

8 Years Ago

danke!
beautiful dreamer

8 Years Ago

welcome
one by one, mermaids
fall from my eyes-
they taste of salt.
you truly are a mermaid eglantine, one who writes mesmerizing pieces. The imagery in this one was beautiful, and I loved it:):):D.

Posted 8 Years Ago


eglantine

8 Years Ago

:) yes, I am a mermaid

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Added on June 5, 2013
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