Sangria stars

Sangria stars

A Poem by eglantine

I sit here,

            cat on my lap,

            an evergreen forest in my lungs

                                    and silver fish in my heart.

 

Your blue eyes are beneath these typewriter keys,

                                    behind every sheet of paper.

 

“I will always find you,” you whispered as our stars ripped apart.

 

 

And you did,

 

                        on a May night warm with sangria and bonfire:

                                    we made eye contact

                                    and our souls crashed

 

                                    into each other

 

                                    like wave against wave,

 

                                    starlight against starlight.

© 2015 eglantine


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eglantine
Title suggestions? I'm stuck...

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G!o
This is beautiful. Is there a better word to say that? The imagery is a 5/5. When i began reading it, i was like (an eyebrow rose) but the second line, grabbed me by the throat and i was gasping for more and more of what's coming next. I love every sentence and the perfection in it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Love the poetic formatting or whatever the official name is. I must try that sometime."Your blue eyes are . . . behind every sheet of paper." love it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


It is funny how life has a way of working out. Your poem is very poignant and I am so glad that your souls crashed into each other!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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G!o
This is beautiful. Is there a better word to say that? The imagery is a 5/5. When i began reading it, i was like (an eyebrow rose) but the second line, grabbed me by the throat and i was gasping for more and more of what's coming next. I love every sentence and the perfection in it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

If u can just use more rhymes and lenghten ur work and just some more words it will create mesmerizing effects and the title can be anything because ur choice of words in the poem are different from others
And surely better

Posted 8 Years Ago


eglantine

8 Years Ago

Thanks for the suggestions but I'm not really the rhyming kind of poet.
Ashwin Thakur

8 Years Ago

You are always welcome you can also read some of my poems
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MAC
The title is perfect and very cool sounding. The poem is well crafted and comes off as very professional. There are also some amazing lines in it. Read it twice, once out loud...tis flawless! If it were voted upon you would have my vote for Laureate.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

eglantine

8 Years Ago

aw why thank you Mark! I appreciate it. I actually have not read it out loud yet... surprisingly. No.. read more
MAC

8 Years Ago

smiling...you really must. try having someone else read it to you. has a tad of surprise to it.
This is well written. The title is fine; just made a note of all fancy/vaguely related words and use them when appropriate.

Posted 8 Years Ago


eglantine

8 Years Ago

Thank you Mr. Edwards--hope all is well
This is amazing! I like how you gradually made it from simple to fiery! But I don't know what Sangria means. If it's not a bother, can you please explain?

Posted 8 Years Ago


eglantine

8 Years Ago

Hello, thanks! Sangria is a wine/juice blended drink :)
beyond Romantic, it feels karmic, a love that repeats from one lifetime to another

Posted 9 Years Ago


You always paint with such enchanted, abstract colors... filled with such dancing imagery... You take us deep into these profound moments of your heart and soul...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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