These Four Walls

These Four Walls

A Poem by SilentDreamer

These four walls
Keep me sane
Help my brain
To think straight

 

These four walls

Are my home

Just me, all alone

With no place to go

 

These four walls

Imprison me

For good reason

Those beyond

Can not hear my calls

 

These four walls

Keep others safe

Keep me away

To do no harm

 

But these four walls

Can not save me

From myself

 

Yet here I will stay

There is no escape

© 2010 SilentDreamer


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its a scary poem but its one of those that i like. very good job

Posted 8 Years Ago


Oh Alex, I love this poem, I still think it's scary!

Posted 8 Years Ago


I think you hit the solitude one must feel in prison. Even though others are around them it must still be lonely in many ways. Those four walls can't save them from themselves is the part that to me shows the their lonely existence. Very good write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Haunting. Very simplistic in it's structure, form, and wording, but that doesn't take away from it's strength, rather brightens it's editing future:) The repetition of the first word works well for you, And I see you did not abuse the power. I enjoyed this :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Very well written indeed. I understand this completely. Great write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


this is very well written.

Posted 8 Years Ago


this was awesome

Posted 8 Years Ago


Well developed concept through poetry. Good job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


I loved this
But the ending was sad :(
anyways, good job on this :D

Posted 8 Years Ago


Like the idea that you can restrict the body but you can't restrict the mind-- it will change if the person decides to change or it won't change at all. I also thought this took a nice form-- very squarelike, like "four walls". Oh yes, it also lacks any emotional words which reads like someone actually in isolation who has grown distant and unemotional. That gives this a very real effect. Well done.

Makosica

Posted 8 Years Ago



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