This Sadness Is Bigger Than Me And You

Please don’t leave me alone here.
I am awake now and gazing into your sleeping eyes
waiting for them to open and let me in.
I ache to be seen
to be felt
to be filled.
I long for the dam to break
so that the river may run once again
all the way to the ocean
to be drunk in turn by the sun
that the clouds may cry life to the earth.
The perfectly relentless cycle
that keeps us all alive.
Please don’t leave me alone here
my tears aren’t enough to heal the world.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is the kind of emotive power I wish I could inject into a poem. I'm trying to know why your writing comes across as so intensely spoken & I think it's the way you mix short & long lines . . . this kind of imitates the way water runs, sometimes hanging up, sometimes running free. I love how that analogy can apply to the idea of love (as a river) or it could be codependence (as one's conqueror). At the end, I also felt the idea that this world is too messed up to go thru it alone. Many strong possibilities & themes to be examined here (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[olla]

this touched me in a place I try not to leave exposed.. "please don't leave me alone here.." too often cried in the silence of the night.. even once is enough for your words to resonate..

[Chris Shaw]

There is real fear in these lines about being alone, to face a future of emptiness. There is almost a desperation in the words for recognition, for the warmth of touch. Such a lonely poem. You have conveyed that well here.

Chris

[emmajoy]

' Please don’t leave me alone here. - I am awake now and.. '

So few words there but, so much said. Seems as if you've woken up to not only a morning but somewhere in your life where you'd rather not be. Seems you want to let go but, know what it will do to you. How wretched is that, how sad, how very sad.

Your writing hits home, examples emotions as few others can. elle. Dear you.

[danielle.]

Thank you Emma, this poem was inspired by a feeling of immense loneliness... a desperate need for deeper connection in a world that can be so shallow. Thank you so much for your kind words xo

[CD Campbell]

It takes a lot of courage to spill the words out in the way that you did. I have felt that way a time or two when things got rough. The sun never seemed to come out. But you grabbed that sentiment and gave it flight, yelled to the world what could be. Lyrically stunning. Great stuff.

[danielle.]

Thank you for taking the time to read my writing and reflect xo

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is quite a good piece....thematically i see someone waking up with another...after a night of loving...but being scared that the person was there only in the physical sense...and has not let the other in as far as emotionally or mentally...
and there is a certain sadness to that...tears may flood....but they can't wash away the pain...
j.

[danielle.]

Thank you Jacob, your interpretations of my poems are always close to the bone xo