The Sum of My Love

Bi-polar moment of losing love, and the despair of the unknown.

If I were to bleed, would you come?

If I were to cry, would you hear me?

If I were to whisper, would you respond?

 

If I cut this wrist,

Would you hear a whimper?

Or perhaps do you think that you might feel it?

 

These riddles I can’t answer.

These rhymes, I don’t know.

 

I do know if I slice this vein,

I will feel relief from this pain.

 

Perhaps,

I will hear you whimper.

Yet will I be able to reach you?

 

But know this my love.

I took this breath knowing

That I loved you.

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Another beautifully written piece. I've often felt this way...a feeling of wanting so deeply to know the mysteries of "what could have been" that I would gladly bleed for the answer.

One suggestion...in the first stanza, last line, for continuity's sake, perhaps "If I were to whisper, would you respond?"

[Kaylee]

Simple, yet effective. And though it doesn't truly matter as much, I enjoyed the actual layout of the poem. It helped with the whole simple-yet-effective deal. Nice job, thank you for sharing!

[Elvis Gilley]

Thanks I appreciate your review.

[Elvis Gilley]

thanks for the help. I will make correction. thanks for the review.