Clifftop

Gripping so tightly onto the edge of

Sanity

My fingernails breaking under the strain of my

Pain

My forehead sweating unable to cope with the

Apathy

My soul aching from the fight in

Vain

 

Reviews

[Aisha]

I really like this poem. It's short, but accomplishes a lot with it, and I think it's better off short, instead of running on and on, just repeating what you've already said. I like the format as well, with the two words on the next line, and then hitting enter again.
The only suggestion I have (and you're free to entirely reject this if you want) would be that you don't have to use capital letters, and only use them in a few places for a bigger effect. Such as only capitalizing sanity, pain, apathy and vain. Personally, I think it would be nice, but as the author, it's up to you.