stealer

i did my best to keep you as my frend she stealing you away i tried to say but you never listen i talk to my other freinds they agree shes a stealer and riper of hearts what would hapen to her if i was to rip her heart back would she let go of my fried let her fearsome grip  yes she did as i stole you back

Author's Note

someone tell me if its good or not its like my first poem so is it good for a first poem?

Reviews

[izzey]

I love it that is amazing did you say you were ten because im eleven years old and keep writing I love your poetry

[Lanky]

Its a decent prospect for a poem but its not in any form of poetry I'm familiar with. I suggest breaking the poem up into lines and stanzas, rather than the current paragraph your using now. It will make the poem flow better and allow others to better understand the emotion that went into its creation. I must say i'm new to poetry as well, but i think that with revision, structure and development your poetry could grow into something wonderful. As for this being a good first poem, its decent. I'll definitely be reading in the future to see how you develop!

[Julia]

Poems aren't really paragraphs. Put it into stanzas. Make sure your grammar is correct. I would suggest getting a teacher or someone to edit it for you.

But, besides that. It's very good. :]