Upon the Ocean Floor

Upon the Ocean Floor

A Poem by Gordon




There was a woman of water

and he swam in the waves of her hair

She said, "I love you," and from her surf he fell

She kissed him with her intoxicating liqueur

And in solitary retreat she cried a new ocean


There was a brave man of stone

and she built her castle upon his chest

He said, "I love you," and from his tower she fell

He kissed her and secretly wept upon his throne

And he ached for her moisture laden kiss again


There was a horizon at war

and they drew their dreams upon its canvas

They said, "I love you," yet from its easel red paint fell

They kissed once more, and he crumbled before her

And she fell silent, uninfluenced by the winds


There was a newborn child of sand

and she crashed into him, her single refuge

She cried, "I love you," and as her waves caressed he fell

She kissed him gently and rest upon his shore

Hers to adore forever, she embraced him deeply

Upon the ocean floor

© 2008 Gordon

Author's Note

Been wanting to do an ocean theme for a while. I've been holding this idea for a while, letting it brew. I welcome your thoughts.

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My thoughts are on the Ocean you have painted such a mystical and radiant portrait breathing life into the words as you give them.
A love story so true and so passionate.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Great imagery-like a song being played while hearing the waves gently roar...
Another masterpiece!!

Posted 15 Years Ago

It took me quite a while to understand this. I suppose am I not good at looking into things but I think I finally get it.

Posted 15 Years Ago

Mmm...this was beautifullly written. I not only love the ocean imagery, but the repetitive nature of the words "I love you" really got to me...like lovers whispering words to one another. Honestly, I can't find a thing about this piece that I don't truly love...the imagery, the flow, the words...it oddly reminds me of one of my favorite films "The Fountain", where love surpasses the centuries. Breathtaking write...

Posted 15 Years Ago

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Added on September 3, 2008
Last Updated on September 5, 2008




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